Chapter to the rose of a Heroin [[No ThunderClan. Don't do drugs]]
ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry. [[No.]]
StarKit wock up and sunlit was in the branches [[deadly sunlight]]. She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter mom [[...?]] wouldn't let her sleep not today.
"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. "Today is important today." [[Equivalent to saying 'I'm going to run so I'm going to run']]
"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was. [[Hopefully 'was']]
"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice! [[Hopefully 'was']]
She flicked [[teleportation?]] outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick. [[Fast.]]
"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said. [[How many times is this mentioned in the next chapters? Oh yeah, cliché]]
StarKit glared. She didn't lake beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different! [[You are very different in a horrible way]]
"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down. [[Spiderleg has been working out]]
"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you." [[The biggest mistake in your life]]
Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!". [[I'd leave ThunderClan.]]
Firehert liked her shoulder. [[Must be a pretty shoulder]] He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti." [[That's not creepy]]
Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her./ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod. [[Jayfeather, a grumpy medicine cat that was illegally mates with a ShadowClan she-cat named Dawnsparkle is proud of his illegal daughter that should have never existed if this was the real Jayfeather]]
"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly." [[It's a miracle how that prophecy has correct spelling. But I think Google Translate could do better]]
StarPaw gasped. What does it mean? [[I knew it would come sooner or later.]]
lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk
[[1. You may update fast but with little text 2. You're a mad-man]]