First Impression: that's a really creepy cover
Great work on developing the story. The beginning definitely has a lot of action, which is great because it creates a tense mood throughout. I also like that you give descriptions of Elise's daily routine at the hospital before all the action starts, so it creates a contrast. There are great details in each scene, and you do a great job with crafting Elise's personality. I also like how you are able to create fear with just your words, and at some point, I almost stopped reading because I was a little terrified.
Overall, great work on writing 37 chapters! Keep up the splendid writing!
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