So first of all, @Lovelessic thank you for following me for all the time along.
I've read your book, and when I read the first chapter, I liked your tone of writing, it expresses how Valerie is depressed in her voice. But when after I continued, the storyline started to get a teeny bit messy.
Basically the story is nice, but try to express your story out in a different kind of way that would make it more clear for your readers to understand. Not all people is skilled in understanding language, so you can try to lower the storyline a bit, to avoid conflict.
Vocabulary and writing is good, the flow is ok. I would give it a Ok//Good Rating of all. Keep up the good work! :)