Hi @clchic0729, I read your two chapters, and yes, I loved your writing. You should consider updating frequently, and your style differs from others. I usually update often a day, but they are quite short, and I like how your chapters are longer than usual, detailed, but not too naggy. It's really interesting how Emily doesn't consider a boyfriend (referring to her age and gender) and her friends does. Personally, I think Marcy is a bit interfering into Kristen's life.
And merely interestingly, Emily is one of my best friends in real life. Try, again to twist up the plot and snap something that will really capture readers' attention. For instance, my book Dark Winters, at the last few chapters, when people think Dee will kiss Nicholas, she kills him and goes away.
See? It surprises all my readers. Not forcing you to do anything, but I recommend something very special and surprising that will knock your fans off their feet.
Keep up the Good Work!
BloodyDireWolf xox