Type Of Story: 5SOS
Author: Lukehemmingsxx1996
Story Rating Estimation: PG-13
Reads: 1.2K
Votes: 117
Comments: 63
Description: 17 year old Tiffany Bowman just wants a normal life, but when she hits a few bumps, who will she run to?
Suggested If: you like 'love triangle'
My Review: The plot is...clichè, but it's not unbearable for me. Unbearable clichè stories are the ones where the character just bumps into 1D or 5SOS on the street or whatever. But, besides it being clichè, nothing of interest is really happening in the story. I mean yeah, Luke is in a coma, but that happens in SO MANY fanfics I'm kinda desensitized to it at this point. If I had to guess, I'd say that he's gonna wake up...and BOOM, not remember anything. Anyway, your chapters could be longer, but they're not too bad. And your grammar and spelling is pretty good, there are just, like, a few typos and such that I'd look at. Overall, I think if you took the time to come up with a more interesting and original plot, you could definitely make a good fanfic :)
Note to Author: Michael is always the bastard in every 5SOS fic that isn't actually centered around him, gahhh Michael is my boo
Rating (1-5): 3
Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)