Creativity: 15/15
I actually enjoy the creativity that the author puts into this story. I find that it's unique and has very bad-boy Vibes, mind you. I find some things similar to the normal type of story, but for the most part, the way the other started the story out was beautiful.
Originality:10 /15
No, I will say this. It does have original Tendencies to it. There are some things that are original. Is it 100% original? No, and here's why a lot of stories I've read are all about how handsome the person is, how he's popular, and how every girl wants him. It's the basic cliche of a story. I am not saying that the story is not good. That is not my intention to say it all. It is still a really good story, but at the end of the day, there are so many little cliche types when it comes to this story. But it's still a good story.
Storytelling:15 /15
I feel like what the storytelling, it's both people. It's not just her telling the story, but it's also him telling the story. I don't want to say as they come together to tell the story, but it's like you get to see both viewpoints through their eyes. And I enjoy that.
Character: 15/15
There's room for character development here; let me explain why. Your characters start off very I don't want to say immature but the girls definitely in mature but she's so headstrong as well and I love that about her. But you can tell that she has a lot of growing up to do, just like the guy. Now, I feel like they will grow into who they need to be by the end of the story, and that's what I can't wait to see because, at the end of the day, the story starts with these two and the way they are. They're both Headstrong, and I think the end, the way that they are, is what's going to build them into beautiful characters at the end.
Story Flows:5 /15
This is where the story kind of needs help. Mind you, I'm not saying this to be mean or malicious to you because, at the end of the day, my intent is nothing but good. It is not meant to be mean. It is not meant to hurt your feelings. It's just a way to help you. When you are writing the story, I noticed that you like don't stop and pause as you go from one thing to another thing to another thing, so your story kind is all over the place. This being said, if you went back to reread your story, you could see that certain things in your story are not flowing when it comes to sentence structure... I am not saying it is not a good story because you still have a good story, but Sentence structure. Is important. And in this very moment of the story, you can wait until the end when you're done writing it but, regardless of what you do. I would recommend personally going back and editing your story. That way, it would go smoothly because, for me, there are a lot of sentences throughout the three chapters that do not run smoothly at all, and they're very difficult to read.
Cover Design:15 /15
I am in love with your cover. Your cover is so beautiful and represents the story so well that it is just the simplicity of your cover that makes it so beautiful. It is not like an overly glamorous cover. It is not a cover that pops, but it works so beautifully.
Final Thoughts: 10/10
I find that the story is unique, and I love the author's uniqueness in writing this story. Do I feel like it does need a little TLC a little bit of editing a little bit of sentence structure 100% And once again that is not to be mean that it's not to be malicious that is not to be hateful. This is just my opinion to help the author better. Does this story need more reads I do feel like it does I feel like people that read this story will fall in love with the characters especially the girl because she's very headstrong. And that's what I love about it because she has that funny moment.
Chapters I read:3
Total points: 70
Summary of the book:
Flora Anderson is finally in college away from her dad and tries to keep her past locked away all she wants it to feel normal. She meets Jake Fisher the most popular guy in college in a a slightly embarrassing way and ends up falling for him but is he really what he seems to be? when her trauma giving ex boyfriend meets her in a party her life becomes a mess again.
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