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📚Reading List 📚
❄️The Last Philosopher❄️
❄️The Right To Die❄️
❄️Rich Re:grets❄️
❄️The Forsaken Race - The Hidden Truth❄️
❄️Rebellion - Prince Of Dawn❄️
❄️Subterra Heart❄️
❄️The Diary Of A Model (The Contract)❄️
❄️To Steal A Weeping Window❄️
❄️The Adventures Of Rel Rel Lost Mirror 2nd Edition❄️
❄️The Edge Of Truth❄️
❄️Machine Heart: A Story Of Mystery And Intrigue❄️
❄️Close Enemies❄️
❄️Dear Myrtle Cove❄️
❄️Reflections Of Choice❄️
❄️Saving Michael❄️
❄️EVAUGHN❄️
❄️False Hate❄️
❄️Outbreak: The First Surge❄️
❄️The Burden of a Secret❄️
❄️Destined Strangers❄️
❄️DELONIX❄️
❄️Tale of the Princess❄️
❄️❀ 𝐍𝐨𝐯𝐚𝐥𝐮𝐧𝐨𝐬𝐢𝐬 ❀ | 18+❄️
❄️Empire: playing dice❄️
❄️The Mind Of A Tipsy Teenager❄️
❄️Return of the Youngest Auclair❄️
❄️US v THEM❄️
❄️The Great Pretende❄️
❄️The Prince and the Punk❄️
❄️Claire: The Diary of A Model 2[The Journey]❄️
❄️Unseen Fragments❄️
❄️Empress Of Self - Ruin❄️
❄️IYO❄️
❄️Tangled Claws❄️
❄️Their Little Princess❄️
❄️Hunted: Destructive Outbreak❄️
❄️Bitter Sweet Affair❄️
❄️Feverish Revenge❄️
❄️FOG OF THE HEART❄️
❄️House Of Zale❄️
❄️Poor in heaven/The lake club❄️
❄️Lie To Me❄️
❄️The Healing Bond❄️
❄️Curse Of Noble Blood❄️
❄️The Prep Diary: How The Prep Became So Preppy❄️
❄️what do we count in a galaxy filled with unlucky Stars?❄️
❄️Of moons and blood❄️
❄️Bloody Royals /18+❄️
❄️Someday, Somewhere, Somehow❄️
❄️Ambrosia Promise❄️
❄️The Lost Chronicles of a Villainess❄️
❄️In The Thorns Of A Castle❄️
❄️The Dream Of Dead❄️
❄️Wrong Planet/ X Together❄️
❄️Rich Man's Ransom // Huening Kai FF✔️❄️
❄️Fated To Be You❄️
❄️Jake Rose The Werewolf❄️
❄️Shadows Of Deceit❄️
❄️The Gap❄️
❄️A Kingdom Of Dreams❄️
❄️Crown Of Spells❄️
❄️Mayapuri- City Of Dreams...❄️
❄️Dungeon❄️
❄️Falling For Jackson Again!❄️
❄️Luna Bloodlust✔️❄️
❄️Best Night Ever❄️
❄️A Touch of Fate❄️
❄️Who Killed Vivrr? ||Tomorrow X Tomorrow❄️
❄️The Lethal Heptagon❄️
❄️How To Survive Murder❄️
❄️The Stalker*Book One*❄️
❄️Love At Dawn❄️
❄️This Is The Fall❄️
❄️Luminaries❄️
❄️Heart Waves❄️
❄️So What If You Love Me?❄️
❄️ViperSong❄️
❄️Guardians Of Heavnsworth❄️
❄️New World Magic❄️
❄️A Kingdom Of Dreams❄️
❄️Not My Little Sister❄️
❄️Stay❄️
❄️Aetheria Falling❄️
❄️1000 Years Of Light❄️
❄️Through Thick And Thin❄️
❄️Auctioned To The Ruthless Billionaire❄️
❄️Finding Love Again❄️
❄️The Beast's Untamed Desire❄️
❄️Solace❄️
❄️In The Night Sky❄️
❄️The Slient Chase❄️
❄️Just Three Days❄️
❄️This Is The way It Goes, I Guess❄️
❄️River Haven Hotel❄️
❄️The Princess And The Fox❄️
❄️Admiring The Light❄️
❄️SHS❄️
❄️The Dragon Emperor❄️
❄️Slate Gray❄️
❄️Their Angel❄️
❄️Veiled Desires❄️
❄️Kendra❄️
❄️Going After The Wrong Guy❄️
❄️Amethyst❄️
❄️Winter Solace❄️
❄️Why Not Us❄️
❄️The Elf Witch❄️
❄️Dream In The Ashes❄️
❄️Keepers of Pokémon❄️
❄️The LoveYou Gave Me❄️
❄️The Pentagon Paradox❄️
❄️"Divine Reckoning: Mahabharata's Resurgence in Kaliyuga"❄️
❄️I'm right here❄️
❄️DARKNESS TOGETHER❄️
❄️ɢʀᴇᴇɴᴠɪʟʟᴇ ʜɪɢʜ ꜱᴄʜᴏᴏʟ ꜱᴇʀɪᴇꜱ: 𝙼𝚄𝚁𝙳𝙴𝚁 𝙸𝚂 𝚃𝙷𝙴 𝙲𝙰𝚂𝙴❄️
❄️UNLOCK YOU❄️
❄️Fool's Pledge❄️
❄️So Far Away❄️
❄️Break Me & Remake Me❄️
❄️PARADISE | Caught In The Fire❄️
❄️Lost in Blue❄️
❄️The Twelve Stars❄️
❄️Sincere's Game - The Name Game❄️
❄️Amongst the Waking Dreams❄️
❄️Mysteries Of Riverwood❄️
❄️THE Destiny Brought Them Together❄️
❄️The Deer and The Wolf❄️
❄️Penny - Guardian❄️
❄️A Christmas Without Spirit❄️
❄️A Bead In The Lost Woods❄️
❄️The 6 devils ...will they last❄️
❄️Guarding Hearts' Whimsy❄️
❄️The Bullied Girl❄️
❄️THE MAN BEHIND MY MIND❄️
❄️The God's Game❄️
❄️Refrain❄️
❄️Peerless❄️
❄️Shattered Souls❄️
❄️The Moon Is New.❄️
❄️Life Within The Halls❄️
❄️VEILED ROSE❄️
❄️𝐄𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐧𝐚𝐥 𝐃𝐚𝐦𝐧𝐚𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧❄️
❄️Foreign Objects❄️
❄️Dear Mocha❄️
❄️Hello Butterflies❄️
❄️𝐖𝐇𝐎 𝐈𝐒 𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐒𝐈𝐍𝐍𝐄𝐑?❄️
❄️𝐍𝐎𝐓𝐇𝐈𝐍𝐆 𝐓𝐎 𝐋𝐎𝐒𝐄❄️
❄️The Chronicles: Mark's Adventures❄️
❄️Threads✔️❄️
❄️The Tales of Evergreen: On Weed-Overgrown Bed❄️
❄️Family - UNITED STRENGTH❄️
❄️The storyThreads Of Fate❄️
❄️HIRAETH❄️
❄️Heir of Shadows and Destruction❄️
❄️His Devilish Queen❄️
❄️Dragoniers❄️
❄️Finding Death❄️
❄️Tears Of Love❄️
❄️JOURNEY OF LOVE❄️
❄️Public Relations❄️
❄️It's A Dangerous Life❄️
❄️I do believe in your galaxy//KTH FF❄️
❄️Heroine❄️
❄️Trust Me❄️
❄️Behind the spotlight {T.K}❄️
❄️Beyond the grave {T.K}❄️
❄️Unnoticed (an original Musical)❄️
❄️THE SURGEON'S SOLITUDE❄️
❄️You're alright, Larusso❄️
❄️Station❄️
❄️The Kingdom❄️
❄️Stay Mine❄️
❄️Oregon Trail: A mystery in plain sight❄️
❄️NOOR❄️
❄️Lost In The Fray❄️
❄️Written in the Stars || TWD❄️
❄️My Guardian Angel❄️
❄️The First Draft❄️
❄️Made It Big❄️
❄️poetic thoughts❄️

❄️Default Title - I Accept The ❤❤ Conditions Of Love ❤❤❄️

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By StoryTellerAD

Creativity: 15/15

The way that the author does this story is remarkable. Now let me explain why I say that creativity is one thing, but also because of how they do it; I've read stories dealing with friendships. However, the way that this author did it took it to the next level.


Originality: 10/15

I can definitely say that this is definitely original when it comes to how long they went without talking. Now is it 100 percent original? I can say no to that one. And the reason I say that is because I've read a lot of different stories dealing with friendships and love. and things like that. But this one takes a different toll on it and a different narrative. I want to say because the way that they do it is unique. The friendship is unique and the obstacles that they're going through and the changes that they are going through is definitely different than what I'm used to.


Storytelling:10 /15

Storytelling is something that really makes me I don't want to say it makes me angry, but it makes me kind of. confused. And the reason I'm kind of confused about this storytelling is not that it's not a good storytelling, but I feel like the way that it is. you get the storytelling aspect of it, but it's like it jumps so far. Like you don't really get the concept of why they fell out until like the 3rd chapter. Like, I feel like in this. story somewhere before you get to the part where they are getting a hug or whatnot, even a small description of why? Why did they fall out? Why had it been 14 years? Like, why so long That is where I feel the storytelling lacks But besides that, it is very interesting and the storytelling I feel is through her eyes and you can really see how she shifted and changed. as she. got older.


Character: 10/15

Chapters that I read, you can definitely tell that there was some character development and some character growth, but not a lot to really see the growth like it's about friendship. And I get that. But still, even though it is about friendship, you still need to have your characters grow. With this, you can see that the girl has grown some and she is very confused when the guy comes up and behind her and hugs her. And you can see that the friendship has shifted to where they're not. really best friends anymore. And she has so many questions. I want to see his growth. I want to see why he is the way he is. What made him decide to come back after 14 years and see. his growth. in the first three chapters, you really don't see the growth as much, but I still appreciated it at the characters.


Story Flows: 5/15

There is a lot of structure that needs to be. edited when it comes to the flow of the story. A lot of the sentences sound. off like they're missing some stuff they don't flow very well. So when you're reading it off your tongue and even if your silent reading, there is some senses that are just so clingy, that's not the word off putting. That's the word that are. off putting and need grammar correction or even sentence instruction correction. Because at the end of the day, the sentences are not as smooth as they could be.


Cover Design: 5/15

Though the cover is nice does not represent the story as it should. I feel like if they went for a different cover. it would really make the story pop more and more people would want to read it. I would say look up    redflower  they have done my covers, and they have amazing work. Even if you ask around there are people that are talented that will take on your cover.


Chapters I read:3


Total points:75


Final Thoughts: 10/10

At the end of the day, I will never say that a story is a bad story, because there is no such thing as a bad story. There is a story that needs touch ups. There is a story that needs rebuilt. There's a story that needs better structure. These are these. are things that I will say and these things are not to be mean or malice. These are things that I see as a reader and a. reviewer. Mind you once again, I am not a professional. I read as a reader and these are the things that I see. Just like my rules say, just like how I have shown how I break things down. Now that being said, do I think this author has potential? This author has tons of potential Do I think that the story needs a little bit of TLC, a little bit of love, a little bit of cleaning up to make it a fantastic story? I do feel. I feel that if the story was edited and the sentence structure. was a little better and the sentences flowed amazingly that this story would be out of the box. Amazing Do I say go back and do it now? No. Go back and do it when the story is finished. Because when the story is finished, then you can Polish it up and it'll be the best story you can possibly think of. Get a cover and the story will be a bestseller is how I feel personally. Right now it is in the baby stage and it does need a lot of TLC and it does need a lot of love. But that being said, it is still remarkable story and it is a story that I enjoyed once. again my opinions and my thoughts are not to be mean. They are not to be malicious. They are not to be hurtful. These are just my brutally honest opinions and that is why my book is called. blunt reviews. because I will not sugarcoat anything and I will not say things that you want to hear. I will say things that you need to hear because at the end of the day, if I cannot help you be a better author or a better writer from my reviews than I am not doing my job So that being said, I think this author has a lot of potential and I can't wait to see the work that they have in the future.

If you want a more Indepth review from a wonderful person look up 

Olivia_Benedetti

she is wonderful at bereaking down stories and goes deeper into reviewing another great group.

 is   LoveofTheCursed


  they have the nexus community and i have read some of their reviews and support their work. These are who i would recommend if you want more of a Professional. review once again I review from a reader's point of view and am in no way a professional. 



Summary of the book:

Story about a girl who has a lot of conditions for accepting love and thats why she has been single .And a boy who became ready to accept all the conditions to love her, bit the more he knows her he understands the conditions she have represents scars of battles she has fought all her life. It doesn't matter whether scars are small or big what matters is the pain .Even if she doesn't have a sword wound she has numerous thorn wounds.Could he understand her and most importantly will she ever love him without conditions .Stay updated to know more🙂🙂

AUTHORS WARNING

Remember that these are, in fact, my thoughts and only mine alone. You do not have to like them or agree with them in any way. But because they are my thoughts, they are final, which means they cannot be swayed or changed in any way. If you do decide to disagree with my thoughts and attack me directly in the comments or DM, I will block you and add you to a block list. Therefore, never reviewing your work ever again.

🪷A.D🪷


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