[chapter three? i thought this was chapter two man
also, we're also doing chapter 4, cause chapter 3 is rlly short]
thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 [i would set this story on fire if i could]
StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. [mos]
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr. [i was so excited because starpaw said "'Jazzpaw get up.' She cried." correctly]
"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked.[you cant go on patrol w/o permission from the deputy, he has to pick u]
"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp. [wrong to, starpaw]
But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11 [oh no!!
that would be me, if i gave a fuck, but girl-]
"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of. [is that rlly blackstar? or is that starblack]
"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!" [sandstorm growled as she heard this, and turned to face starpaw, before pouncing onto her, killing her.
i wish that happened.]
StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant. [what prophcey.. oh yeah]
thnkx and ples no more flams [burn.]