AVNEIL SS- WAQT

By zeee003

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An avneil story I wrote a few years back.. posting it finally. Hoping for positive response. The story start... More

You're always on my mind
Unexpected
Revelation
1st Teaser
Note
Hate?
Decisions
Thank you
Feelings and cupids
Next?

Finally

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By zeee003

Next part here, Well finally my favourite part is here, so even I was super excited to write this one!

Neil- nahin chhodunga tumhara haath main!

Avneil share an intense and teary eyelock.

Neil- jab pehle chhodke gayi thi na.. tab humare family ke liye zinda rehna pada tha mujhe.. yeh sochkar ki yeh meri Avni ki perfect family hai air inhe toh mujhe khush rakhna hi hai.. aur shayad isiliye bhi kyunki mujhe lagta tha ki Avni ab nahin rahi, sirf mere liye usne apni jaan dedi.. toh family ke liye ek jhooti hi sahi par hasi toh hasta tha main.. kyunki meri asli hasi toh tum saath leke chali gayi thi. Avni I swear.. tumhari kasam agar iss baar phirse chhodke chali gayi na.. jaan nikal jaegi..

Avni keeps her hand on his mouth to stop him from speaking further.

Her tears just wouldn't stop, not that she tried to anyway, it was her decision and she knew it would break him then, but it anyway had to be taken and just hearing about a fraction of his pain in these 10 years broke her once again. She couldn't bear the thought of something happening to him.

Avni- khabardaar jo dobara yeh kaha.. chhodungi nahin main tumhe!

Neil- pakka?

Neil asks, playfully as well as with heartbreakingly hopeful eyes, making Avni realise her words.

Avni- main soch bhi nahin sakti Neil, kaanp uthti hun main yeh sochkar ki tum kaise bina roye, infact humesha ek smile rakhte the apne face pe.. mere paas toh Tara Sitara aur Sunheri the jo humare pyaar ko, meri situation ko samajhte the, mujhe sambhalte the.. main toh kai baar unke saamne toot jaati thi.. par tumhe toh humari poori family ko sambhalna tha.. kaise tumne apne dard ko apne andar dabaake rakha? Aur ab tak chhipa rahe ho!

Neil hugs Avni and cries, while she smiles with tears as he's finally letting out his feelings.

After they come out of the hug, Avni is still on Neil's lap.

Neil- ab chhodke mat jaana mujhe please.

Avni- kyun?

Neil- Bas aise hi

Avni- Aise hi? Tumhara na kuch nahin ho sakta Neil.

She tries to get up but Neil holds her even more tighter.

Avni- Neil.. chhodo mujhe..

Neil- pehle baat toh sun lo.. nahin janna main aisa kyun chahta hun.. nahin janna toh jao..

Avni- Nahin.. nahin.. janna hai na.

Neil smiles.

Neil- Kyunki jab tum door jaati ho na toh dil ki dhadkan saath le jaati ho.. kehne ko toh saansein chal rahi hoti hain par ek zinda laash ho jaata hun main.. jiski rooh Avni ke paas hoti hai.. because I.. LOVE.. YOU Avni.. Neil loved Avni, loves Avni and will always love Avni.. forever and ever.

Avni hugs him hearing this, and both tears wouldn't stop.

Avni- agar yahi baat thi toh.. pehle kyun nahin bataya?

Neil- kehne ko toh tum bhi keh sakti thi na?

Avni- kya?

Neil- wahi jo tumhe kehna chahiye.

They break their hug and look at each other.

Neil- Chhodo tumse nahin hoga, miss tubelight..

Avni holds him to stop him from leaving her.

Avni- phirse chhodne nahin dungi tumhe!

Neil looks at her.

Avni- tumne bhi kaha tha na abhi.. abhi hi chhod doge?

Neil- Avni.. mera woh matlab..

Neil says, concerned, but Avni cuts him,

Avni- I LOVE YOU Neil Khanna.. humesha se sirf tumse pyaar kiya hai aur humesha karungi!

They hug again, wide grins on their faces, accompanied by tears of happiness.

Then they watch sunset sitting on a rock in each other's arms.

...

Avneil come back to Sukoon ghar, hand in hand, smiling widely. Mowgli notices this and runs to them.

Mowgli- aap donon ki batti ho gayi?

Neil- batti?

Mowgli- Sunheri didi ne kaha tha ki aap donon ki cutti ho gayi thi aur ab batti ho jaegi.

Avni- haan ho gayi humari batti, hai na Neil?

Neil nods, smiling at his son.

Daisy- toh matlab aj Neil bhaiya humare saath yahin par rahenge?

Avni- kya?

Pinky- Haan, Tara didi ne kaha ki ap donon ki friendship ke baad, ap yahin par apna time spend karoge.

Neil- Bilkul theek kaha Tara ne.. main aj raat yahin rahunga.

Avni glares at him, while he tries to stop his laughter.

Samrat calls the kids from inside and they run.

Sunheri comes to see them hand in hand and smiles.

Avni hugs her, thanking her for everything.

Sunheri- maine ghar call kar diya tha Neil, sorry puche bina kiya.. par unhe bhi yeh surprise kak achhi tarah dena chahiye na?

Neil- koi zarurat nahin sorry bolne ki, balki mujhe toh tumhe thank you bolna chahiye, perfect plan tha yeh.

Avni too smiles seeing their interaction.

...

After sometime, DD and Mitali are also at Sukoom ghar.

Mitali- finally humara plan successful ho gaya, waise bhi ek policewoman ki planning fail thodi ho sakti thi.

Mitali says, eating kheer which Sunheri prepared for celebrating Avneil.

Neil- kaam toh tune criminals wale kiye hain Mitali! Bechari meri Avni ko kitna dara diya tha.

DD- Meri Avni han? Kya baat hai sir!

Avni blushes while others laugh.

Avni- waise DD.. sorry, maine tumhe gusse mein dande se maara..

DD- It's okay bhabhi! Waise Sir.. bhabhi apki aise hi pitai karti thi? Aap jo kehte the..

DD says, not noticing his desperate actions to ask him to make quiet.

Neil- DD!

Avni turns a glares at Neil, while DD trails off.

Avni- kya kehte the sir? Main unki pitayi karti hun?

Neil- Nahin Avni.. woh main toh mazaak kar raha tha.

Avni- tumhe toh main chhodungi nahin..

Anticipating it, Neil runs and Avni runs behind him. They both run around the room, with Avni being pissed off.

Mitali- Come on guys.. tum donon ka khudka ek baccha hai.. aur khud bacchon jaisi harkatein kar rahe ho!

Avni bumps to Sunheri while chasing Neil and Sunheri loses her balance. But before she fall down, DD catches her and now they share an eyelock. Oblivious to all this Avneil are busy with the chase, but Mitali stops both of them and motions them to look ahead.

All three share a knowing eye contact and together they..

They - 'cough'

Bringing the duo back from their eyelock and get awkward. The women sense it and before Neil could start his teasing session, they glare at him, effectively shutting him up.

Mitali- waise Avni.. tumhe toh cooking nahin aati thi na.. toh phir uss din rajma chawal kaise banaya?

Avni- ab main thik thak khana bana leti hun.

Neil- hmm.. isiliye uss din woh chai bani thi.

(They remember their holi meet.)

Avni- haan!

Other three raise a brow at each other.

Avni- khaane ki baat chal hi rahi hai toh.. let me prepare the dinner.

Sunheri- main bhi aati hun.

Mitali- main bhi help karun?

Avni- sure.. chalo na.

They get up and move to the kitchen.

Neil- DD! Teri toh main..

DD- Sorry sir.. muh se nikal gaya.

Neil- it's okay! Waise ek baat kehni thi tujhe.

DD- Haan sir kahiye na.

Neil- yahi.. kya sir-sir lagake rakha hai.. tu mujhe umm.. haan bhaiya bula sakta hai.

DD hesitates.

Neil- Ab main tera sir toh hun nahin.. toh try toh maar.

DD- Umm.. Neil.. Neil bhai?

Neil- That's more like it.

Both of them grin.

Neil- chal, hum bhi unki help karte hain.

...

In kitchen,

Mitali looks frustrated.

Mitali- guys.. mujhe bhi toh koi kaam do.

Avni- Mitali, tum cutlery arrange kardo na.

Mitali- Oh come on.. mujhe bhi khaana banane aata hai.

Sunheri- bilkul aata hoga.. par tum humari mehmaan ho.

Mitali- Avni.. tumne mujhe abhi bhi maaf nahin kiya?

Avni stops what she's doing, and turns to her.

Avni- aisi koi baat nahin hai.. main..

She hugs her.

Avni- chalo.. tum yeh sabzi kaat do.

That's when she notices Neil and DD coming.

Avni- Nahin Neil.. khabardaar jo andar aaye!

Neil- kyun? Main kyun nahin aa sakta?

Avni- mujhe acchi tarah pata hai ki tum kitchen ka kya haal karte ho.

DD- par bhabhi.. hum bahar bore ho rahe hain.

Sunheri- Isiliye hume disturb karne chale aaye!

Avni- chalo.. bahar niklo donon..

Neil- how mean and rude!

Avni smiles and takes a glass to drink water.

Here, Mitali is trying to control her laughter.

DD- humari yahan koi value hi nahin hai. Chaliye Neil bhai!

And here's the reaction hearing 'Neil bhai'!

Mitali ended up cutting her finger, the glass fell from Avni's hand and Sunheri was tasting something, the spoon fell from her hand.

Three - Neil bhai? DD?

Neil and DD look at each other and laugh at their reaction.

...

After sometime, Sunheri is applying bandage to Mitali.

Avni- tum donon ke chakkar mein bechari Mitali ki ungli kat gayi.

Mitali- chota sa cut hai.. I'm absolutely okay.

Avni- tum uski side ho ya meri?

She asked pointing at Neil.

Neil- Oh hello! Yeh side ki baat kahan se aai?

Avni(mimicking him)- Mitali meri dost hai.. (normal) koi apne dost to chot pahunchata hai kya?

Neil- maine konsi chot pahunchayi hai? Woh toh DD ne..

Avni- DD ko bhi tumne hi kaha hoga..

Sunheri- Bass karo donon ab! Jab dekho jhagda shuru ho jaata hai.

Avneil- isne start kiya? Haww maine?

Mitali- Mowgli bhi aisi harkat nahin karta hoga, I bet!

Avneil get quiet at this.

Neil- woh chodo! Mitali meri side hai.

Avni- nahin meri side hai.. Mitali?

Mitali- ofc main.. (Neil smiles) Avni ke side hun.

Avni shows thenga to Neil, who's shocked.

DD- issi baat pe mujhe ek gaana yaad aa raha hai..
"Dost dost na raha.."

Sunheri continues,

Sunheri- "pyaar pyaar na raha!"

They hi fi. All of them laugh looking at Neil's face.

That's when Mitali gets a call.

Mitali- okay we'll be there. DD hume jaana hoga.. case mein lead mili hai.

DD- chaliye ma'am, humein abhi nikalna chahiye.

They get up, and saying bye leave quickly.

Sunheri- main kitchen mein jaati hun.. Tara- Sitara akele hain.. waise bhi tujhe kuch aur manage karne ki..

She trails off pointing at Neil. Avni understands as Neil is making a sulking face.

Sunheri leaves, Avni comes and stands in front of Neil, who tries gets up.

Avni- Neil, please.. bachhon jaise mat behave karo na.. choti si baat..

Neil- main uss baat se gussa nahin hun Avni. Main ghabra jaata hun jab bhi tum mujhse alag hone ki baat karti ho.. I know ki tumne aisa kuch nahin kaha, par mujhe.. pata nahin kyun.. bohot weird laga.

Avni- it's okay Neil.. hum donon ko hi sabse move on karke normal hone mein time lagega. Aur main tumhe kabhi chhodke nahin jaungi.. I promise!

They hug, Neil closes his eyes. That's when Mowgli enters the room and they move apart.

Mowgli- chalo na papa humare saath.. khelte hain.. please!

Neil picks Mowgli up.

Neil- chal mere tiger!

Avni smiles as she sees the father son duo go out.

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Bebe- Iska matlab hai ki hum donon..

Avneil nod smiling.

Neil- Uss din toh bada aankhon mein khoye the.. sach sach bata kya baat hai?

Voice- Surprise!

Avni turns and gets shocked!

There you go. Please leave feedback and do vote if you liked it.

Plus, Avneil finally confessed!!💕

Regards,
ZeeZones





















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