AVNEIL SS- WAQT

By zeee003

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An avneil story I wrote a few years back.. posting it finally. Hoping for positive response. The story start... More

You're always on my mind
Unexpected
Revelation
1st Teaser
Note
Decisions
Thank you
Feelings and cupids
Finally
Next?

Hate?

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By zeee003

So, I finally have some time in hand, and this SS will be completed soon, within my time frame.

We've crossed 650+ views .. wohoo!!

Also a big revelation is there in this part!

So let's start!

Avni- tumhe yaad tha?

Neil- Kaise bhul sakta hun?

They share an eyelock and reminded of a past memory.

Flashback..

Avneil are sitting, having their dinner in their room.

Neil eats something spicy and starts hiccuping.

Avni- Neil? Kya hua tum theek toh ho?

Neil- haan.. woh actually mujhe spicy khaane se hichki aati hai.

Avni- hain? Spicy khaane se hichki?

Neil- haan.. tum ispe research karlo.. kuch toh taras khao mujh bechare pe.

Neil says between his hiccups.

Avni brings him some honey.

Neil's condition gets better after having honey.

Neil- thank god! I feel better now.

Avni- kitney naazuk ho tum! Mujhe toh spicy food bohot pasand hai.

She says and picks up a chilli and bites it.

She starts coughing badly after having it.

Neil- Avni.. yaar!

Neil says and takes out a chocolate from his pocket.

Neil- yeh khao.. you will feel better.

After calming down,

Avni- Tum chocolate pocket mein rakhte ho?

Neil- emergencies mein kaam aata hai.

Avni starts laughing hearing his words.

Flashback ends..

Avni- Thank God! Main toh soch rahi thi iss waqt main kahan se chocolate laungi.

Neil smiles.

Neil- ab aap so jao. Kal apke liye ek surprise hai.

Mowgli- kaisa surprise?

Neil- woh jaanne ke liye toh apko sona padega, taaki ap jaldi se uthke surprise dekh sako.

Mowgli- mumma Lori sunao na!

Avni- pehle lay down.

Avni sings Aa leke chalun..

Neil and Mowgli both sleep hearing the lori.
...

At morning,

Mowgli is holding both his parents hands smilingly.

Mowgli- Sachmein Mumma hum kuch din yahin rahenge? Thank you Papa!

Avneil realise that whole family is standing in front of them.

Avni- Sunheri...

Sunheri nods and takes Mowgli inside.

Bebe- Mumma?

Shweta- Papa?

Prakash- puttar.. Neil ko kab pata chala?

Shweta- Prakash ji.. ap bhi?

Neil- Han Mom.. Mowgli m.. mera aur Avni ka beta hai.

Avni wipes her tears.

Bebe- woh baccha.. Mowgli mera padpota hai?

Avneil nod.

Bebe- Avni tune yeh humse kyun chupaya? Bol Avni.. kyun chupaya?

Avni couldn't meet their eyes.. she leaves from there.

Neil- Bebe.. Avni ki ismein toh atleast koi galti nahin hai.

Shweta- yeh tu keh raha hai tillu?

Neil- Kyunki usne yeh sab meri jaan bachane ke liye kiya!

Neil tells them about Vidyut's video, leaving them shocked.

Neil- isiliye please mere bacche par iss sab ka asar nahin padna chahiye.

Neil says and leaves from there.

Shweta- saari problems mere bacchon ke hi zindagi mein kyun?

Bebe- koi baat nahin, ab hum Mowgli ko khoob pyaar denge aur..

Prakash- aur jo bhi unn donon ka faisla hoga usmein unko support karenge.

Prakash says, to which both the ladies nod unsure as they know what he's trying to say.
...

Neil's room,

Neil breaks down in his room.

Avneil sad tune plays..

Neil- agar aj Vidyut zinda hota na.. toh main khud hi usse maar deta.. usne meri zindagi barbaad kardi.. mujhse mera sab kuch cheen liya.. uski wajah se main apne bacche ko god mein khila nahin paaya.. meri.. meri Avni mujhse door di.

Neil cries saying all this.

Here, Avni is seen blabbering something outside Neil's room.

Avni- nahin.. Neil aisa kuch nahin karega, woh iss baat ko samjhega.. par agar usne aisa kiya toh main.. main..

In hyperness, she comes to his the door.

Neil notices her and stands up quickly wiping his tears.

Neil- kya hua Avni? Tim yahan?

Avni gets nervous at the sudden attention.

Avni- woh.. woh actually, kuch nahin!

Neil- Avni.. kya baat hai?

Avni comes in front of him.

Avni- tum.. tum aisa nahin karoge na Neil?

Neil gets confused.

Neil- kaisa nahin karunga?

Avni- tum Mowgli ko mujhse nahin chinoge na?

Neil gets shocked.

Avni- uski custody le liye file nahin karoge na? Please Neil aisa mat karna.. main..

Neil- Avni.. relax.. shaant ho jao.

Neil- Pagal ladki! Itna bura hun kya main? Tumne socha bhi kaise ki main aisi harkat karunga.. main humare bete ko uski maa se kabhi door nahin karunga. Bhale hi humare beech bohot issues hain.. par uska asar humare bacche par nahin padega.

Avni has tears in her eyes. She realises its time!

Avni- isse pehle ki tumhe yeh baat kahin aur se.. I mean galat waqt pe pata chale.. main tumhe kuch batana chahti hun.. I know ki tum toot jaoge.. par main nahin chahti ki kisi galat time tumhe yeh baat pata chale aur situation aur complicate ho jae.

Neil- konsi baat Avni?

Neil asks confused and scared.

Before Avni could say a word, Samrat comes..

Samrat- jaan didi! Neil bhaiya apko sab..

He stops abruptly as Avni wipes her tears.

Samrat- actually, ap donon ko sab lunch pe bula rahe hain.

He says and awkwardly goes away from there.

Avni- shayad yeh sahi waqt nahin hai.

Avni goes down.

Neil- kya kya apne andar dabaake rakha hai Avni?

Neil sighs exasperated and follows her.
...

At dining table, all are having lunch. Mowgli is sitting in between of our Avneil.

Suddenly he starts coughing.

Avneil- kya hua beta?

Neil makes him drink water while Avni pats his back.

Pinky- yay main jeet gayi.. main jeet gayi.

She quietens down upon noticing everyone's eyes on her.

Mowgli- yeh cheating hai! Mujhe thaska lag gaya tha.

Pinky- Everything is fair in games!

Neil- yeh kya chak raha hai yahan pe?

Avni- Mowgli? Pinky?

Avni- kar kya rahe the tum donon?

Daisy- main batati hun.. yeh donon fast eating competition kar rahe the aur Pinky jeet gayi.

Avni- aplog aisa kyun kar rahe the? Maine mana kiya hai na fast khaane se.

Pinky goes to Avni.

Pinky- kyunki hume pata chal gaya tha ki Mowgli apka beta hai.

Avneil look at each other.

Pinky- isiliye ab ap humse kam aur usse zyada pyaar karoge. Isiliye humne bet lagaya tha.

Avni- Pinky, beta! Aisa pehle kabhi hua hai ki maine kisise kam pyaar kiya hai? Aur jahaan tak Mowgli ki baat hai.. wkh toh humesha se mera beta hai.. isse mere aur ap sabke pyaar aur bonding mein koi change na tha aur na hoga.. okay?

All the kids say okay.

Avni- from now on, koi aisi bet nahin lagegi.. clear?

Pinky nods and hugs Avni.

Pinky- sorry jaan didi!

Neil smiles at them and looks at Avni.
...

At night, Avni brings coffee for Neil in the garden.

Avni- apne liye bana rahi thi, toh tumhare liye bhi bana di.

She turns to go, but Neil holds her wrist.

Neil- tum kuch batana chahti thi na?

Avni nods and sits next to him. She's nervous.

Avni- woh.. main yeh.. aah!!

Neil's eyes widen as in nervousness she spills some hot coffee in her hand.

Neil- Oh shit!

Neil runs inside and brings a first aid box.

Avni- itni bhi chot nahin lagi hai Neil!

Neil- chup.. keep quiet!!

Neil says sternly making Avni shut her mouth.

She lovingly looks at him as he puts ointment and bandage on her wound.

Tere dar par sanam.. chale aaye tu na aaya toh hum chale aaye.. chale ayye.. chale aaye.

Neil looks at her after that, and gets amazed at the way she's looking at him.

Neil- tum jaake rest karlo! Par hum kal baat karenge!!

Avni nods and leaves, all lost in the moment they shared. Neil too sighs as he doesn't know where this is going.

Neil- hum kahan hai Avni? Aur hum kahan jaa rahe hain.
...

It's morning,

Neil is sleeping beside Mowgli.

Avni comes to the room and smiles seeing the father son duo.

Bebe comes behind and smiles too.

Bebe- Yeh Neil bhi na.. abhi tak so raha hai.

Before she could wake Neil up,

Shweta- Bebe! Come downs fast! Bebe!

Bebe- Ohho! Isko bhi chain nahin hai. Puttar tu zara Neil ko utha dena.. warna yeh Shweta saara ghar sar oe utha legi.

Avni tries to say no, but Bebe goes.

Avni slowly tries to wake Neil up.

Avni- Neil.. Neil utho!

Neil- umm.. sone dona!

Avni- Neil..

Her leg twists and she falls on him, waking him up.

Both get lost in each other's eyes!

They realise they position and get up.

Avni- sor.. sorry.

Avni says and leaves from there quickly.
...

Downstairs,

In kitchen,

Shweta- Bebe.. meri toh samajh nahin aa raha hai ki inn donon ka kya hoga ab.

Bebe- han Shweta! Par mujhe lagta hai ki sab theek ho jaega jald hi.
...

In study room,

Avni comes to talk to Neil but then loses courage and turns to leave.

Neil- Avni ruko! Humesha bhaagti kyun ho tum?

Avni- main bhaag nahin rahi thi Neil.

Neil- Yeah right!! Avni toh kabhi nahin bhaagti.. woh toh haath pakadkar problems face karti hai. Sach toh yeh hai ki meri Avni toh 10 saal pehle hi mar chuki hai.. jal gaya tha uska dil uss aag mein.. yeh jo mere saamne khadi hai na.. yeh Nilanjana hai jisse sirf bhaagna aata hai.

Neil says in rage.

Avni- correction Mr. Neil Khanna!! It's Neilanjana.. not Nilanjana.

Avni also responds in the same tone.

Neil- kya matlab?

Avni- Neil-anjana.. matlab Neil ki jaan!!

Neil looks at her with teary eyes. Avni turns, with her back to him.

Avni- 3 din se tumhara bartaav dekhkar aisa laga ki shayad tum mujhe samjhoge.. par tum toh.. anyways! Main ab khudko explain nahin karungi.. tumhe jo sochna hai tum socho!

Neil- woh behaviour sirf Mowgli ke liye tha.. tumhare liye nahin.. tumhare liye.. tumhare diye hue dhoke ke liye toh main kabhi tumhe kabhi maaf nahin kar sakta.. jo dard mujhe tab hua tha jab maine unn reports pe tumhara naam dekha tha.. woh dard bohot gehra tha. Toot gaya tha main yeh sochkar.. jaankar ki tumhe kabhi nahin dekh paunga. Par tum.. tum bacchon ke saath ek acchi life jee rahi thi.. khush..

Avni interrupts,

Avni- khush? Tumhe lagta hai main khush thi?

Both of them are in tears by now.

Neil- han.. khush thi tum! Tumhare paas Mowgli jo tha, mere paas toh koi nahin tha.. aisa koi nahin jisse apna dard baat sakun.. baat kar sakun.. ek Ali tha, uski bhi shaadi ho gayi.. apni ek khudki family.

He smiles sadly and then asks slowly with pain.

Neil- kyun chhodke chali gayi thi Avni? Kyun nahin rahi mere saath? Kyun Avni kyun? I hate you for leaving me.. for leaving your happy family behind. Aakhir kyun Avni? Kyun?

Neil asks coming close to
her.



They share a painful eyelock remembering their past and their moments.

Avni- majboor thi main Neil!

Neil- koi bhi majburi meri Avni ko kamzor nahin kar sakti thi. Aisi bhi kya majboori?

Avni- papaji! Papaji thi meri kamzori. Unhi ko bachane ke liye gai thi main!

Neil- jaanta hun ki Vidyut's se hum sabko bachane ke liye gayi thi tum. Yeh toh koi majboori nahin..

Avni- nahin Neil! Woh toh main khud bachaati! Par uss waqt uss Vidyut ne aur koi raasta hi nahin chhoda tha. Tum janna chahte ho na ki kya mujhe tumpe bharosa nahin tha? Humare pyaar pe bharosa nahin tha?

Neil nods.

Avni- tha mujhe tumpe bharosa! Isiliye gayi thi taaki tum kisi doraahe pe aake na khade ho jao.

Neil's eyes are full of questions.

Avni- Neil.. uske paas ek video thi.. jismein.. usne Papa.. Papaji ko drug karke unse tumpe goli chalwayi thi! Jo Neela maa ne tumhe dhakka dekar khud pe le li!

Avni says slowly, holding his shoulders.

While Neil gets shocked! He couldn't believe his ears!

Neil- dad ne goli? Nahin dad aisa nahin kar sakte!

Avni- maine kaha na Neil.. woh drugs ke affect mein the.. unhone jaanke kuch nahin kiya. Vidyut uss video ko tamper karke police ko dikhane wala tha.

Neil sits on a nearby chair.

Avni- usne uske badle mein mujhse shaadi karne ki baat rakhi thi! Main toh aisa nahin kar sakti thi na Neil! Kyunki mujhoar sirf tumhara hak hai. Isiliye maine uski lanka mein aag laga di.. taaki Vidyut tumhe Papaji ke naam pe blackmail na kar sake.

Neil couldn't understand what to do, how to behave! He finally knew the reason behind Avni leaving him.

Avni feels pain looking at Neil's broken face. She was broken too!

Avni- agar main waisa nahin karti toh.. tumhe mujhmein aur Papaji se kisi ek ko chunna padta.. logic, emotions, truth.. in sabmein main tumhe phasta nahin dekh sakti thi. Tum toot jaate.. kyunki tumhara donon ke liye pyaar barabar tha. Maine maut ka naatak isiliye racha taaki tum aur Papaji donon safe raho.

Neil closes his eyes. Avni looks away crying.

Avni goes out from there, giving Neil time to grasp everything.

Neil opens his eyes only to find himself alone. He breaks down.

The music I've added gives proper Avneil emotional vibes.. atleast to me.

Thank you for reading,
Regards,
Zeee003.



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