Chapter to the rose of a Heroin [ Are you serious ]
ok jazzie-kun pleas dont get mad at me cause your not in it yet. You'l apear soon dont worry.
StarKit wock up and sunlit was in the branches. [ They're in the trees! :O ]
She closed her eyes againstill tired. Butter [ No comment] mom wouldn't let her sleep not today.
"Sweety its time to get up" said Dawnsparkle; her eys shinning. "Today is important today." [ Important enough to say it twice! ]
"What is it Mom" said StarKit awake right away. Then the she cat rememembered what today was.
"Ohmigosh its my serimony today!' she squelled excercisedly. Today was the day she was an apprentice!
She flicked outside not even waiting for her Mom. But her Mom cot up to her quick.
"Sweety you know the clans don't except cat slike use sometimes." She said. [ oh great, the overused. 'IM DIFFERENT' cat. ]
StarKit glared. She didn't lake beig told that. Just because her Mom was a usedto be Shadowclan cat and her dad was jayFeather the medicine Cat didn"t mean she ws different! [ Yes, it does ]
"StarPaw come here." Said FireStar from the leg. He jumped down.
"StarKit it s tome for you to become an apentice: he said. "Your a strong brave cat and because of that I will mentor with you." [ YOU ARE GOING TO REGRET THAT. TRUST ME. ]
Ever body gasped. StarKit did too. Se herd hear mother say "Wow!".
Firehert liked her shoulder. [ it was a nice shoulder ]
He whispered in her ear "youll be the best their ever was StarPaw I know ti."
Surpised she walked away when they were done howling for her./ Then she went ofer to JayFeathern and DawnSparkle who were very prod.
"Daughetr where very happy but he have to say something said Jayfeather his chest puffed ouit. "You see there is this prophcy Starcaln gave me it said that out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."
StarPaw gasped. What does it mean? [ Oblivious protagonist is oblivious ]
lol I update fast dont i. REVEIW or ill hit over the head with a frying pan! XDD jk [ please stop talking ]
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