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Now before we start the elimination process I have a really very important question that I wanna ask you guys
And that is.....
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Okay now let's start with our elimination round!!
Book : Cold Husband
By taebaby77kkkk
(Your book has got three judges cause the score difference between your previous two judges was very really high so i asked one more judge that is Dragon_Kitara to judge your book just to be more sure you know so yeah I would request you to please follow her too )
Judge: taeyeonjunluv
Title: 4/5
Cover: 7/10
Description: 8/10
First Impression: 5/10
Writing style: 6/10
Character actions and decisions: 4/10 Plot: 7/20
Explanation: 2/5
Sense: 3/10
Spelling: 5/10
Total: 51/100
The title of the book definitely suits the theme. The cover and description do the book justice. The plot, action of characters and the decisions made by them were a little bit questionable to me.
If I were to advice the author, I'd like to start out by telling them to work on their plot first. The narrative style is pretty good, it's like reading a play but I would suggest to work on portraying the emotions of the characters completely before moving on to the next stage; the character development felt a bit abrupt do please try to focus on improving that too. Also, in several situations, the author undermined severe issues like rape and homosexuality (it's not an issue, I'm stating how it hard for a community to exist peacefully). I believe that it is necessary for any author that uploads their work on wattpad to be aware of matters that can trigger people. Joking about rape and showing disgust at a person's preference in romantic partners isn't right so please try to consider that.
Summing it up, please work on:
• Plot.
• Character development.
• Expressing emotions.
•Taking into consideration what could/couldn't be triggering and harmful to people.
Juge: mintaegish
Title: 3.5/5
Cover: 8/10
Description: 8/10
First impression: 8/10
Writing style: 7.5/10
Character's action and decision: 8/10 Plot: 17/20
Explanation: 4/5
Sense: 8.5/10
Grammar and vocab: 7.5/10
Total:80/100
Review: The book was quite fun to read, the part that kept me hooked to this book was Taehyung's character. I liked the way how he wasn't abusive like the other ffs. The grammar and vocab needs some improvement but I know for sure that the author will improve, even my writing isn't that nice XD. I really enjoyed the book.
Judge:Dragon_Kitara
Title: 2/5
Cover: 7/10
Description: 4/10
First Impression: 5/10
Writing Style: 3/10
Character's actions and decisions: 6/10
Plot: 12/20
Explanation: 6/5
Sense: 6/10
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary: 5/10
Total: 56/100
Review/Advices: Your title is really common and when I read it I felt like I predicted the whole book before ! could even read it. I suggest renaming it to something more original but still have the same vibe.
Your description was, quite straightforward and not that all intriguing. Maybe add some mystery to her, spoil a little plot twist or add dialogues. Something to entice the reader.
As for the grammar and spelling, I've spotted your misuse of captial letters an commas. You use a lot of exclamation marks and question marks, it sounds a bit too dramatic to be honest. After writing your chapters, do proofread to get these minor errors out of the way.
As for your writing style, I'm not a fan of these type of dialogue books. It's just my opinion, it's quite hard to follow and process because I get confused most of the time.
Total: 80+56=136
Average:68
Bonus:3
Grand Total: 71
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Book: Love or Duty
By:Taehyunique_Taereen
Judge:mintaegish
Title: 4/5
Cover: 10/10
Description: 8.5/10
First impression: 8.5/10
Writing style: 8/10
Character's action and decision: 8/10
Plot: 19/20
Explanation: 4.5/5
Sense: 9/10
Grammar, spelling and vocabulary: 8.5/10
Total:88/100
Review: This book is now one of my personal favorites. I've liked the plot but the writing style can be improved. I enjoy reading Taehyung's character personally but Jimin was surely my favorite. The FL's character, Sam was kinda rude but the character development she had was approving. grammar and vocab was good too but from my side, I think the author can write even better. To sum up everything, I thoroughly enjoyed the book and am waiting for more chapter to come up with.
Judge:taeyeonjunluv
Title: 5/5
Cover: 7/10
Description: 8/10
First Impression: 7/10
Writing style: 8/10
Character actions and decisions: 8/10 Plot: 17/20
Explanation: 4/5
Sense: 9/10
Spelling: 6/10
Total: 79/100
The author has done well in choosing the title. The cover and description are right for the book. This book follows the writing style of a play, too. The plot and character actions are justifiable.
The story in itself is quite good. The plot is there, and there's also a sense of thrill at the end of each chapter, making you want to see what happens next.
My advice to the author: • Work on vocabulary. It's okay to use simple words, please don't use words if you're not sure what they mean.
• Please try to articulate your sentences properly; you fail to convey the message entirely because your sentences feel incomplete in a lot of places.
• Try to focus on how the characters developed instead of skipping through it; explain the factors that brought about these changes.
. I would advice you to not to use Korean terms with English as it makes the sentence grammatically wrong.
Total: 79+88=167
Average:83.5
Bonus:3
Grand Total: 86.5
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Book:.Sincerely, mine
By:lobelybub
Judge: Moon_Sugarlips07
Title : 4/5
[I deducted 1 marks because I guess your creative mind was capable of making something else atleast as much as I got to know you from your writting, Your title suits well if you have planned Taehyung to be obbssessed with Y/N further ahead but it's kinda common and it's quite too open like it shows perfectly that where it's gonna end up.]
Cover : 6/10
[The text is way small and according to your story it's too bland like it needs to be a little more dark themed, try some graphic shops for a better cover if you need DM me I'll recommend you some best ones, and One more thing I'm not that good but I'll make a cover for this story too.]
Description : 7/10
[So it's not that appealing to be honest, it's too open it looks like a summary rather than a blurb, add some lines like some dialogues…I was basically upset when I read that, I was like a typical psycho vibes, not my tea, and that really drained the idea of reading it and I think your story is way better, so update it a little.]
First Impression : 9/10
[ Title, cover, blurb was not upto my expectations but Gurlllllllll, The starting…. I was like bruhhh? You won my heart at that trust me that made me so tensed in the very start, I expected a normal getting ready type of thing but when that started with a dialogue and that was about Yoongi, I was like OMG? What….I loved it trust me.]
Writting style : 8/10
[The writting style was nice, but you need to build up your vocabulary more or simply search for synonyms, choice of words and arranging them makes a huge difference so please do pay a little concern over this too. Otherwise everything was amazing and perfect.]
Character actions and decisions : 10/10
[Your story had a great advantage here, I liked the way you kept your characters behavior clear, A mafia is a personality and you described it well, the way you kept that monster like personality even after Y/N entered the story made me feel connected and comfortable like there are books where a cold-hearted mafia turns into a softy in one day after meeting the female lead and that really doesn't make any sense for me, You kept your characters stuck to the plot and that was the best part of your story.]
Plot : 17/20
[The plot was amazing but I guess this story needs to be a little slow paced so that the plot comes in view even more, the plot twits were chef's kiss but there were some scenes where I thought I needed more, like a proper execution that was missing, some flashbacks and some hints provided from the very start were needed, that must have helped with the atmosphere building.]
Explaination : 3/5
[I thing you need to read a little more on atmosphere building and Scene description as you know it's a book not a film you need to describe the surroundings, facial features so that a reader will be connected enough with the books.]
Sense : 9/10
[Nothing to say here, everything makes sense just because your character building is great, this story had a great Emotional impact on me as I'm a literal softy for yoongi, and I hope you'll give this book a meaningful ending, like if there isn't a proper character development shown and the book ends with taehyung, the story won't make sense anymore, I'm looking forward for the upcoming chapters.]
Spelling, Grammer and vocabulary : 8/10
[Same as the writing style point.]
Review :
[As a reader that book was amazing, but as a judge I did what I was supposed to do, please If I did sound offensive I'm sorry and genuinely I'm waiting for the upcoming chapters, I wish my review helped you and if you have any questions regarding it you can hit me up any time.]
Judge: astral_being_
Title: The title sounds possessive. It gained my attention. It's neither too long nor short. The story is still ongoing. The author updated only 12 chapters so I can't tell whether it matches the storyline but reading the description it's somewhat suiting the plot. [4/5]
Cover: The cover is attractive. It matched with the story theme (mafia). The fonts are clear. It isn't messy. I liked the filter used on the cover. [9/10]
Description: It attracts the interests of the readers. You can add types of fonts to it to make it more attractive. Like, you can make 'Kim Taehyung' bold or italic, something like this. And Yes, It gives you the idea of what's going on. [ 8/10]
First Impression: Seeing the book cover, title and description made me want to read. The first chapters are good, although I wanted more story on Min Yoongi (maybe a side character) and the female lead. [7/10]
Writing Style: The writing style was nice but I think you should mention whose POV is going at the beginning of the chapter. The readers won't get confused if you do that. The paragraph is neither too long nor short. The writing style was creative. Though you can use more fonts. [7/10]
Character action and Decision: Characters actions and decision matches with how the author described them. It's a mafia story where the male lead (Kim Taehyung) is cold, heartless and he acted according to his role. So, I think Characters were good with their roles and dialogues. [9/10]
Plot: It was quite heartbreaking and emotional, where the male lead forces the female lead to break up with her boyfriend and when the female lead meets her boyfriend after breaking up. So, it was good enough to make me stay and it was quite intriguing. [16/20]
Explanation: The explanation was quite good and the author explained the emotions very well. [4/5]
Sense: The story makes sense and whatever happened in the story is acceptable. [9/10]
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary: In a chapter, you wrote, "Did they check her phone?" I asked. It should be Taehyung /He asked. When you write third person's point of view use the third-person pronouns such as "he," "she," "it," or "they" when not referring to characters by name. You may change it in your book. There are small grammatical mistakes and the author did not use any short cut words. The vocabulary was not too simple. [6/10]
Total: [79/100]
Total:81+79=160
Average:80
Bonus:7
Grand Total:87
Book: Moon Called Wizard
By: FrozenHeartsGalaxy
Judge: Sugas_chimchim
Title:9/10
Cover: 5/5
Description: 6/10
First impression: 6/10
Writing style: 3/10
Character's action and decisions: 9/10 Plot: 20/20
Explanation: 4/5
Sense: 3/10
Spelling, Grammar, and Vocabulary. 2/10
Total: 67/100
Review/Advice:
Title:
The title is very attention grabbing since it is very interesting and rather thought provoking. It makes the reader think "What does that mean?" and makes them want to read to find out. Not too long, not too short. It's just right.
Cover:
Very attention grabbing. It's artistic and very pretty. It also seems to match the theme of the book well.
Description:
It is attention grabbing, but it is short. It doesn't give many hints to what you could expect from the book, although it just give you a very basic view of the plot. Maybe a little bit more detail could be added to atract the readers attention a bit more.
First impression:
After seeing the title, cover, and description, I feel like would set this book aside to read at a later date. It has grabbed my attention enough to make me want to read it, but I, personally and honestly, do not feel drawn to read it straight away. After reading the first few chapters, I have to say, honestly, it took me a while to get into the story. I believe this may be due to some grammatical errors which made it slightly difficult to read and understand. If I am being honest, again, the fact that it was slightly difficult to understand did slightly put me off reading. Not because it's a bad story, but because it was hard to keep up with. Also, I just wanted to make a point of talking about the time jumps in the first three chapters. These are very big time jumps, and where it ust keep the story flowing, I feel you should maybe try and let the reader now more about what has happened between these time jumps, with a little more backstory, because it is a little bit non-consistant without description.
I can see that the author has tried writing this in a highly descriptive style, which is great. I love a book with lots of description, and the variety of adjectives used is amazing. However, when it comes to how the writing flows, it was really quite difficult to understand.
Writing style:
This is a very creative story with wonderful imagery You just need to work on making your writing a bit clearer so the reader can understand the text. Maybe try working and practicing your grammar skills, as well as using a little more punctuation to make your sentences Now nicer. Tiy using commas and other punctuation marks to break up your longer sentences so things don't get too wordy.
Character actions and decision:
I think the character actions and decisions match the personality of the characters well, however there are a few, very small, continuity errors that could be adressed through checking the writing before publishing. These errors are very small and would probably be overlooked by a casual reader. It may only be because I am reading it and paying attention to every detail that I noticed these, and I may be overthinking things. But I would still be careful because there are still very beady-eyed readers out there who may pick up on the way some of the decisions made by characters could be different from who the author has made them to be.
Plot:
The plot is very creative. It is very intriguing. at first, it may take a reader a while to get into the story, but this isn't due to it being a bad plot. (This is mainly because it is fairly hard to follow due to grammar issues) When you get a few chapters into the story, the plot picks up and it actually gets rather interesting. Readers will find it easy to get hooked on the story and will mostly want to read on. I think this is because this story plot is so unlike any other. It is so unique and clever that it makes readers want to finish the story. I also think this is because the plot is new, unseen, and as a reader, you are always looking for something new to gain your interest. This is good because no one wants to keep reading the same plotline over and over again.
Explanation:
The author has done a very good job at conveying characters' personalities and emotions, through thorough descriptions and creative speech styles. Maybe, as something to make this even better though, the authour could try making sentences clearer, with grammar improvement. This will help the readers, who struggle slightly following certain writing styles, understand perfectly what the author trying to say.
Sense: The story is actually fairly hard to follow in the early chapters. I honestly think, again, this is due to the grammar issues. Due to these slight flaws, it is hard to make sense of the writing in general. As for the plot, it is easy to follow as long as you are reading continously. If you take breaks inbetween chapters, however, I can understand why it would be easy to get lost in the plot. To solve this, the author may want to think about writing, at the start of the next chapters,however, I can understand why it would be easy to get lost in the plot. To solve this, the author may want to think about writing, at the start of the next chapters, a hint or a reminder of the previous chapter just so the readers can remember what has already happened The further you get into the book, it gets easier to become attatched to the plot and want to continue reading. As the story goes on, while the errors of grammar and spelling still make it difficult to read, the plot gets easier to follow. This helps the reader make sense of what is going on in the story and coaxes them to read on. If the author could try and solve the language errors, this story would be very enjoyable to read. As I said before, the plot is really good and readers will enjoy it - but the readers, I believe, may enjoy this story even more if it wa easier to read.
Vocabulary:
The spelling is good, not many mistakes at all. The grammar, whoever, could use a little bit of work. There are just a few sentences throughout the book which do not make a lot of sense until read through a couple of times. My advice is to always make sure to check over your chapters, at least twice before publishing. Also try using a little bit more punctuation in your longer sentences so it is smoother and easier to read. When the longer sentences are broken down slightly, the writing flows easier. that aside, the vocabulary used and words chosen for description are wonderful. There is a huge varieties of adjectives used and the way the speech flows is great.
Judge: abyssofbangtan
Title: 5/5
Cover: 10/10
Description: 7.5/10
First impression:10/10
Writing style: 9/10
Character's action and decisions: 10/10
Plot: 20/20
Explanation: 4.5/5
Sense: 10/10
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary: 8/10
Total: 94
Review/Advice: Please scroll down to read advice/review of each category in which I've deducted points from....
Description: The description is bit vague maybe adding/Explaining a little more about the story will attract the readers attention.
Writing style: I loved the way you wrote the book it was great and easy to understand, the author put efforts in writing every action but there were some things that I didn't really liked (I can't exactly point it out, sorry) but I hope that the author will change it to be perfect when she re-edit the book.
Plot: I can't believe THAT I GAVE A BOOK full marks on the plot, but I think the author deserved it coz I know how hard it's to write a good plot (◠‿・)—☆
Writing style: I loved the way you wrote the book it was great and easy to understand, the author put efforts in writing every action but there were some things that I didn't really liked (I can't exactly point it out, sorry) but I hope that the author will change it to be perfect when she re-edit the book.
Plot: I can't believe THAT I GAVE A BOOK full marks on the plot, but I think the author deserved it coz I know how hard it's to write a good plot (◠‿・)—☆
Explanation: The explanation was good but can get better so work on it, it'll be perfect one day.
Spelling grammar and vocabulary: There were some mistakes in the grammar and vocabulary, If the author will proofread the book 1/2 times it'll profit the book greatly.
That's it, I hope you reach the perception of your successෆ╹ .̮ ╹ෆ
Total: 94+67=161
Average:80.5
Bonus:7
Grand Total:87.5
Book:Emerald Ocean
By: 0Vincenzo_Cassano0
I don't know why stupid wattpad won't let me mention you i've been trying to do that for two days now 😒😒 so I just wrote your username 😔😔
Judge: Sugas_chimchim
Title: 2/5
Cover: 8/10
Description: 8/10
First impression: 8/10
Writing style: 10/10
Character's actions and decisions: 10/10
Plot: 20/20
Explanation: 5/5
Sense: 10/10
Spelling, Grammar, and Vocabulary: 10/10
Total: 91/100
Review:
Title:
Personally I think the title is a little bit bland. There's not too much there to grab the readers attention, and it doesn't really tell you much about the story itself either.
Cover:
The cover is eye catching and creative, though the colour scheme is a little dark and samey. Maybe try adding a few brighter greens so it pops a bit more. More readers will be attracted to read this is the cover catches their eye a bit more.
Description :
The description is creative and is very thought provoking. It makes the reader think 'wow, this story could be interesting! The only thing I could advice is maybe say a bit more about the plot of the story, so readers know what they are getting themselves into when they chose to read this story.
First impression:
From the title, cover and description, honestly this wouldn't be a book I'd chose to read. I just don't feel drawn to this book that much. That said, the description is thought provoking, and I think, given time, the description may be able to change my mind because of how creative it sounds. I think, with the title and cover, You could add a bit more detail and make things a little more eye catching just so readers can feel more drawn to the book. From the first few chapters, I can honestly say, I was amazed by the great detail the author has used. They have used a huge variety of words to their advantages and has painted out every sence as a clear image in the reader's mind. The imagery is amazing, and character and plot introductions? Just as brilliant.
Writing style: The author has used a very descriptive style of writing, which is amazing for readers because it paints an image in their minds, of what the writer is trying to convey. The writing is very clear and precise. The author definately knew exactly what they wanted to write and have executed that with great clarity. I honestly don't think there is anything that really needs improving on. If I had to point out one thing to advice on, I'd maybe say try and break up some of your longer paragraphs, just so they don't look too overwhelming to some readers. When paragraphs are shorter, sometimes the writing is easier to follow. But other then that, I would say the writing style for this book is near perfect.
Character's actions and decisions:
The character actions and decisions throughout the book are parallel to their personalities. All of the characters' personalities are consistant all the way through the story, which probably means the author spent extra time making notes and planning the characters. It shows that the author put a huge amount of thought and time into the development of these characters. This is a brilliant thing to do and a great skill to have as an author.
Plot:
Theplot is unique, creative, and completely different to anything I've ever read. So huge props to the author for this because coming up with something completely new and different is a very hard thing to do and it requires a bright, extraordinary imagination. The storylines are gripping and imeresing for the readers. I don't really think there is any advice I could give to improve because it is just amazing!
Explanation:
The plot, characters, writing style and description - throughout the whole book - has made complete sense. Everything (thoughts, emotions, actions, decisions, scenery, and ideas) has been conveyed tothe readers with the upmost clarity. This author has a truly incredible talent for writing.
The author has done an amzing job of creating bright, brilliant personalities for their characters. The characters are lovable and relatable, in some ways, for the readers. This is amazing, and is a very important thing for authors to do. If the reader can't connect with a character, they won't want to read about them. The author has made this exceptional characters this way by using their writing talents to convey the emotions and choices of the characters perfectly. The use of description, sensort/ emotional language, and imagery has braught these characters to life!
Sense:
The plot, characters, writing style and description - throughout the whole book - has made complete sense. Everything (thoughts, emotions, actions, for writing decisions, scenery, and ideas) has been conveyed tothe readers with the upmost clarity. This author has a truly incredible talent for writing.
Spelling, Grammar, and Vocabulary:
The author has done an amazing job of keeping the grammar flawless and the spelling mistakes to a minimum. I didn't catch any mistakes at all as I read through this book, which is fantastic. The variety of words used to describe characters, scenery, emotions and feelings - it is so colourful and creative! This author is amazingly talented!
Judge: Nefelibatas_world
Title: 4/5 [1 like the title. It sounds intriguing and mysterious at first if you read it and it matches with the green (emerald) theme of the cover. It makes the reader curious as to how the title relates to the story and what's going to be in it. The first thought I had in my mind was that it's about someone's eyes. Looking at the blurb, one can guess that maybe it's the name of the main female lead but when you actually read the book you get to know that it's actually the color of the main lead's eyes. I guess it's about how Taehyung falls in love with Judith, drowns in the beauty of her emarald eyes—maybe that's what the title says but I'm still curious to know how actually it's wrapping your whole plot and relates to the story.]
Cover: 8/10 [It's nice—it has Tae, Jk, and Judith on the cover and the green theme if the cover-perfectly relates to the theme of book. But, I don't like the title tbh, the fonts don't look good—the 'ocean' is almost invisible and very thin. Overall, the cover kinda looks dull but it's fine. Oh! And I still want to know why Jk is on the cover btw
Description: 7/10 [Like it but it doesn't really calls me to read the book or make me curious about the story. You need to work on it to make something better and pick something from your book for the blurb so the reader wants to read the book.]
First impression: 6/10 [As I said, I was curious because of the title and cover and blurb were somewhat okay. Also, I was stuck to the book after first 3 chapters because of something because of one thing and that's your descriptions!)
Writing style: 7/10 [Kinda messed up because the paragraphs were tooooo long ngl. You need to have an idea as to how many lines at maximum your paragraphs should contai—5-7 at maximum I would say but yours were literally like about 10-15, that's too much hun. Most of time you didn't even give any gap between the paragraphs which makes it look conjusted and stings in my eyes tbh. I don't like books which have messed up format. Also, I think you don't know the proper use of punctuations. You don't use a comma after completing a dialogue but before the apostrophes. You've to use comma, periods, and exclamation marks for proper structure which you didn't. I was really displeased due to your use of punctuations and format. Also, in the first chapter, some of your paragraphs were mistakenly aligned in the middle instead if right. I saw how you added the pictures to have a clear view of the scenes. I'm not at all in the denial of using the pictures until and unless you actually describe the scenes and add the pictures just to
have a more clear idea but of those who use pictures just because they're lazy to describe the scenes so nice job!]
Character actions and decision: 10/10 [Perfect, the personalities of each and every character was totally going well with their actions and decisions. You really did a great job with the descriptions!]
Plot: 18/20 [Well, I loved it. At first I thought it would be a typical love story where the prince would fall in love with some weak and pathetic peasant girl but nope our author had something else planned for her, a valet! Your plot isn't something very mysterious or full of secrets type but that's what the speciality is. It's simple yet intriguing! I absolutely loved how to introduced the characters and the interactions between tae and judith— freaking loved it! I really love how they've that hate-love(care) kind of relationship.]
Explanation: 5/5 [Come here please Imma shower you with kisses and hugs🤧💕💓💗💖 I'm in love with your descriptions ngl. I'm a legit sucker for descriptions in a book and girl, you just got my heart. Be it the surroundings, the weather, the palace, the character, the outfits, the emotions and feelings—your descriptions were just amajin!]
Sense : 10/10 (Everything perfectly made sense!)
Spelling, grammer and vocabulary: 9/10 [I'm in love with your vocabulary!❤ I didn't really find any grammatical mistakes but there were some typos here and there and as I said above in the writing style section that the use of punctuations was wrong.
For example : • "Hey, pass it me”, said her brother as they started to sprint after the snatching the gold chain from the noble lady.
Correction :
1. You need to either use a comma or an exclamation after 'pass it to me'. If Jimin is shouting then use an exclamation mark or otherwise a comma is fine. 2. No use of comma after the dialogue and before the said. 3. The 'the' before 'snatching' is irrelevant here.
So the correct way to write it would be : • "Hey, pass it me!" said her brother as they started to sprint after snatching the gold chain from the noble lady.]
Total: 84/100
Judge's Review : “An absolutely marvelous book written! I'm really sad that great authors like you are so underrated. The descriptions in your book were chef's kiss but you lacked in writing style and blurb. I'm sure you can improve. Good luck!❤
Total: 91+84=175
Average: 87.5
Bonus:3
Grand Total: 90.5
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