Rewrite the Stars (Completed)

By priyapariyaar

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One of the hardest decision in life is to choose between love and family.... N Shiva has to make that decisi... More

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prologue
mission joote - churao/bachao!
who will win??
jeet gaya hum!!!!!
shadi ki baat
planing
rumours
new feelings
ride
mission vicky!!!!
plan successful or flop??
care in the first step in love
checking chemistry
fever!!!
dream !!
ignore
anniversary
celebration
closer
shiva with other girl
realising my feeling
shiva ko bachana
kya chal raha hai??
what am i feeling??
its 'IT' what i m thinking??
is it love???
Am I in LOVE????
yes i m in love
confession
ShiVi ❤
godhbharai
truth or dare
shadi ki baat
pandya parivaar ki bahu??
raavi outbrust
saathi rey thoda thehar ja
humari adhuri kahani
tujhe kitna chaahein lage hum
REWRITE THE STARS
pehle pyaar ka pehla gham
duniya yeh jeeti gayi, dil har gaya
ranjha
Dev-raavi ki shadi ho gayi 🥺😭
sara jag chad ke bas tenu hi hai chuneya
shadi nahi karna
iktara
epilogue
new story

tujhe kabse meri chinta hone lagi??

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Shiva pov

Yeh reema phone kyu nahi utta rahi!!!! 🤔

After leaving reema house , I went to meet the suppliers ...... N after that I had to come to the store.... It's been 2 hours since then but still they are not calling me....

Kahi chipkali ko zyada chot toh nahi lag gaya!!! 😰

Shiva 🧠- oi gadhere ..... Chot choti si thi.... Itna hyper kyu ho raha hai!! (Annoyed)

Shiva ❤- hyper kyu na ho meri chipkali behosh hai.....!!! (Concerned)

🧠- kuch zyada hi fikar nahi karne laga hai yeh uski!!! (Annoyed)

❤- abb sab teri zyada emotionless toh nahi ho sakte na....!!! (Sarcastically)

🧠- kuch zyada hi emotion nahi dikha raha !! (Sarcastically) .... Aur ek minutes kabse woh chipkali MERI ho gayi?? (Suspiciously)

❤- yeh toh tujhe pata hona chahiye na... Sochne ka department tera hai... Mera nahi!!! (Irritatingly)

🧠- acha ji..... Pyaar tujhe karna hai, fikar tujhe karna hai, par blame mujhe!!! (Irritatingly)

❤- toh tune accept kar hi liya ki tujhe usse pyaar hai!! (Smirking)

🧠- meine yeh kab bola?? (Shockingly)

❤- toh phir pyaar tujhe karna hai yeh kyu bola?? (Suspiciously)

🧠- woh toh flow flow mein nikal gaya!! (Nervously)

❤- dekh raha hoon ....!!! (Sarcastically)

Gautam- Shiva!!!! (Shouting)

I gasped..... What was I thinking!!!!

No no I was not supposed to think this....

Yeh chipkali mujhe pagal kar degi!!! 😫

Gautam- Shiva!!! (Shouting)

I look at him

Gautam- kaha koya huwa hai???

Shiva - kuch nahi gombi!!! (Nervously)

Gautam- Tu thik tho hai na?? (Concerned)

Shiva - ha mein theek hoon.... Lekin kyu??

Gautam- kabse bula raha hoon jawaab hi nahi de raha..... (I put my head down feeling embarrassed) mein ghar ja raha hoon.... Tu dukan ka dyan rakhna.... Mein dev ko baj dunga!!!

Shiva - ji gombi!!! (Smiling)

Then gombi left....

Shiva kam mein dhyan rakh.... Faltu ki chiz mein nahi!!!😒

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As I was attending some customer

Tujhe kabse meri chinta hone lagi??

I look up to raavi looking at me with wide eyes.... I immediately hug her !!!!!

Shiva - Tu yaha!!!! (Happily)

..............

Yeh Chipkali kuch bol kyu nahi rahi?? 🤔

Then I realised our position

Oh shit!!!!! 🤦‍♂

I immediately broke the hug and look here n there feeling embarrassed!!! She was looking at me with wide eyes

Kaka - raavi tum??? (Smiling)

Kaka came from the storeroom... Thank God he was inside doing some work.... Nahi toh agar ajj unhone humein hug karke huwe dekhte toh mein toh sharam se maar hi jata!!!

Raavi- ki kaka... Kaise hai app?? (Smiling)

Kaka - acha hoon aur tum???..... Aur ek minute yeh chot kaise lagi?? (Concerned)

Raavi-kuch nahi woh toh bass ase hi.... (Awkwardly laughing)

I look at her to see her wound but then our eyes met....

Raavi- mujhe tujhse kuch baat karni hai!! (Sternly)

Shiva - par mujhe tujhe kuch baat nahi karni hai (nervously) ..... Kaka mein andar stock check karta hoon!!!

Telling this I run inside before this chipkali catches me

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Tere dimag toh theek tha na Shiva???😒 Tune usse hug kaise kiya!!!!! 😬

🧠- ismein bhi meri galti!! 😩
❤-🤭
🧠- zyada hass maat!!!! 😒

I was feeling really embarrassed..... This was my first hug with a girl apart from bhabhi n maa.... But the worst part was my first hug was with chipkali.....

Aya!!!! 😫

Someone patted on my shoulder ...... I turn to see chipkali looking at me

Raavi- yeh sab kya tha???

Shiva - dekh meine woh sab Jaan bhuj kar nahi kiya......aur mujhe iske baare mein baat nahi karna .... (Nervously)

Raavi- kyu?? Kyu baat nahi karni.... Karna parega!!! (Egoistically)

Shiva - dekh meine kaha na ki woh sab meine tujhe jaan bhuj kar nahi kiya.... Woh hug toh head of the moment mein ho gaya!!! (Nervously)

Raavi- acha.... Tu hug ke bare mein baat kar raha tha!!! (Chuckle)

Kahi patthar ki wajah se dimag mein chot tho nahi aayi.... Pagal wagal toh nahi ho gayi!!! 😬😬

Shiva - tu hass kyu rahi hai??? (Nervously )

Raavi- agar hasu na toh phir kya rahu.... Tu bhi na mujhe tere hug karne se koyi problem nahi hai!!! (Laughing)

😳

I look at her with wide eyes...... She look at me n become nervous

Raavi- I mean..... It's k na hug toh dost bhi karte hai na!!! (Nervously)

Shiva - mein tera koyi dost wost nahi hoon!! (Annoyed)

Raavi- agar dost nahi hai toh phir mujhe bachaya kyu???

I look at her to see her already looking at me...

Shiva - woh... Woh toh teri jagad agar koyi bhi hota tab bhi bacha leta (confidently) ..... Kud ko itna special mat samajh!!!! (Laughing)

Raavi- that's means tu sabke liye itni chinta karta hai, darta hai ki unhe kuch ho na jaye.... Unki itni parwa karta hai... Jab tha woh theek na jo jaye, unke saath rehta hai.... Unke liye apni jaan thak jokim mein dalta hai!!! (Sarcastically)

😳

Shiva - a mami ki behan ki beti kya bakwas kar rahi hai??? (Angrily)

Raavi- bakwas nahi sach bol rahi hoon.... Tujhe kabse meri chinta hone lagi??? (Suspiciously)...... Dekh jhut toh tu bolna maat!!!!!

I didn't knew how to reply....

Raavi- mujhe pata hai ki tu bachpan se mujhe dosti karna chahta tha.... Of course Somnath ki sabse sundar ladki jo hoon..... (Confidently)

🤦‍♂️

N then she was back in her real avatar!!!!

Raavi- tujhe asa kohi stunt wunt nahi karna chahiye kyuki meri dosti tho already tere saath hai ....... Tu na mera bestest friend (I look at her irritatingly) .... I mean tu mera bestest frienemy hai!!!!

She gave me an side hug..... Before I could proceed my thinking...she kiss my cheek....

Raavi- thank u so much Meri jaan bachane ke liye.... Agar ajj tu nahi hota na toh sayad ...... (She stop fearfully)

Before I could say anything.... I heard some footsteps.... I softly push raavi away..... Since I didn't want any awkward moment!!!

Dev - Shiva.... Raavi tum dono yaha !!! (Surprise)

Raavi- ha actually.... (I interrupted)

Shiva - actually yeh meri help kar rahi hai!!! (Smiling)

I can't let this chipkali to spill the beans

Dev - tu raavi ki madat le raha hai???? (Shockingly)

Kabhi kabhi yeh dev bhi over dramatic ho jata hai ..... K k janta hoon ki hi hum ladte hai but that doesn't mean ki yeh itna shock ho jaye!!!! 😒😒

Raavi- kyu mein shiva ki help nahi kar sakti kya??? (Making a pout)

🤦‍♂️

Dev - I didn't mean that.... Actually tum dono ek dusre ke help kar rahe hoon..... Thoda ajip lag raha hai!!! (Nervously)

Before any one of us could reply.... Raavi phone rang...

Ring ring...

Raavi- hello masi...... Ha mein aa rahi hoon.... K k jaldi aa rahi hoon ..... Phone toh rakho... K bye!!!!

She cut the call

Raavi- k mujhe ghar jana hoga.... Masi already kaafi hyper ho gayi hai..... K bye!!!! (Laughing)

She was leaving when she turn back again....

Raavi- k bye shiva.... Bye dev!!! (Smiling)

Dev - bye take care!!!! (Smiling)

I just ignore her 😎

After that we got busy in Our work....

Shiva pov end

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There in Pandya niwas gombi and dhara were having a serious discussion....

Gautam- dhara kal dekha na tune raavi ne kaise sabko sambhala..... Pehle hum sab ke liye khaana banaya .... Hum sab ka dhyan rakha.... Specially tera.... Mujhe toh raavi bohot achi lagi.... I mean woh bohot achi hai... Par kal jaise usne humara khayal rakha na (smiling) ... Mujhe lagta hai ki woh pandya parivaar ki bahu ke liye best candidate hai!!! (Laughing)

Dhara - ha gombi mujhe bhi raavi bohot pasand hai.... Choti behan hai woh meri...!!! (Smiling)

Gautam- Tu na jaldi yeh rishte ki baat raavi aur dev se kar..... Mujhe yeh rishte ke liye late nahi karna!!! (Excitingly)

Dhara - ha.... Mein ajj hi dev se baat karti hoon agar uski ha hai tab hi raavi se baat karungi warna nahi!!! (Smiling)

Gautam- ha yeh bhi hai!!! (Smiling)

Krish - aur agar dev ki na huwi toh??? (Excitingly)

Dhara and gautam look at krish shockingly....

Gautam - iska matlab tu humari baatein chupke se sun raha tha!!! (Pulling his ear)

Krish - ahh..... Gombi chodo na bohot dard ho raha hai!!! (Fake crying)

Dhara - gombi chodo mere bache ko!!!

Gautam left krish ear

Krish - app dono itne zor se baat karoge toh pata tho chal jayega.... Mana ki maa kamre mein hai.... Lekin mein toh hall mein hoon na.... Agar baat secret hi rakhni thi toh inti zor se kyu bol rahe teh!!!! (Making a puppet face)

Gautam- hume laga tu padh raha tha!!! (Sarcastically)

Krish - gombi padhai ko maro goli (excitingly) (Gautam and dhara angrily look at him) .... I mean thik hai padhai bhi important hai.... Par abhi yeh important hai ki agar dev ne shadi ke liye mana kar liya toh phir kya karoge app dono!!!!

Gautam and dhara thought...

Dhara - ha baat toh tu theek bol raha hai (thoughtfully)... Agar mana kiya toh bohot bura lagega!!! (Sadly)

Gautam- agar shiva se pucha toh woh toh pure Somnath mein hi aag laga dega!!!! (Fearfully)

Three of them gasped imagining that situation....

Krish - ek idea hai....

Dhara and Gautam curiously look at krish...

Krish - agar dev ne mana kiya tho phir abb raavi ki shadi mujhse karwa dena.... Pata hai mein usse chota hoon lekin family ke khushi ke liye mein adjust kar lunga!!! (Chuckle)

Dhara and gombi both pull his ear

Dhara - krish!!!!!! (Scolding)

Gautam- isliye bolta hoon padhai mein dhyan de!!! (Scolding)

Krish - sorry sorry mein toh mazak kar raha tha!!! (Laughing)... Ahh!!!!

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In narayan house

Raavi was busy writing something in her diary.... As she finish writing she read it..

Raavi- ajj bohot special din hai..... Like seriously shiva ne meri jaan bachayi.... Can u imagine Bhootnath ne!!!! ... Bohot bolta tah na ki jaan le lunga, maar dunga par dekho ajj ussi ne meri jaan bachayi.....

Shiva dil ka bura nahi hai.... Ha bass thoda.... Nahi thoda nahi bohot short temper hai but it's k.... Atleast dikhawa tho nahi karta na.... Lekin ajj jo reema, anokhi aur sai ne kaha..... Kya woh sab sach bol rahe the... Kya Shiva sach mein mere liye daar gaya tha..... Aur kya bol rahe teh ki aag dono taraf se hai.... Kya mere dil mein Shiva ke liye kuch feeling hai.... Na Shiva ke dil mein mere liye !!!! Iska pata toh lagana hi hoga!!!!

Toh phir lets start....kal se MISSION SHIVA on!!! Shiva ke dil ki baat toh jaan kar hi rahungi... Kya pata bich mein mere dil ki baat bhi pata lage!!

Par ek sawal abb bhi hai ki akhir kyu USSE KABSE MERI CHINTA HONE LAGI???

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That's it , the end

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N ya i forgot to write that in this story.... Raavi is not after dev like they show in the serial before marriage!!!

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