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Review 5

Book title: Tides of Obsession
Author: AdultOfTheFuture

Firstly, I love the aestheticness of your book cover and how it relates to your book plot. The first chapter of your book was a bit confusing at the start, what with the tense you used, your flow of grammar and the way you narrated events. But later on, about the fifth page, I began to grasp the concept of your story more and I appreciated the non cliche plot.

However, I think your grammar in the first chapter wasn't great at all, it was totally confusing and you made use of the past participle tense with words that were mixed in past and present. Sometimes you changed the entire narration to the present tense. But it was only in the first chapter that this happened and can be corrected during edits or proofreading.

Secondly, I love your descriptions throughout the remaining chapters and your flow of dialogue. It was marvelous. One thing though, I am having some trouble placing the age of the main leads and the setting of the story because the dialogue was mildly in the ancient times. Made me think of a few historic books I read sometime, but if this was intentional, carry on!

Your book summary was pretty good. I love it, the character development was spot on but your sentence structure needs some work. Your style of writing is awesome and it was obvious you had a fairly good grasp of your vocabulary. I felt for the way the MC was being caged and couldn't express herself the way she wanted to because of her overprotective parents.

I guess that didn't shelter her from what happened after and I hated the fact that she was misunderstood. I don't know if I like Claudia's character but she is pretty (according to the description) and certainly a fashionista. I found it a bit hard picturing the male character but maybe you could chip in a few more descriptions of him here and there or snippets in conversations.

Some parts might be a bit telly but it's not really noticeable (only a critic can note this). Interesting storyline and writing and would love to read more chapters if possible. I was broken when I saw it was only a preview or something. Anyways, with a few edits and tweaks here and there, your book is good to go.

Good job author!