Re-write

Chapter 1 The Letter

I pace out side standing in front of the mail box, waiting in anticipation, "todays the day"   I think, "if I don't hear from  the University of  Padua  today then I didn't get  In ." I look  up as I hear the sound of  the mail person whistling the same tune she does everyday, she looks at me seeming concerned and says " Libby are you still waiting on that letter?"  I nods and  " Well I might have something for you !"

She reached in her bag and hands me an envelope with my name on it, I jump up and down give the mail carrier a quick hug and run inside yelling "Mom, Dad, Coal, it came my letter from UP finally came!" I'm still jumping when my mom dad and older brother Coal all  to the living room.

Coal urges me to open it with the flick of his hand, using sign language bc that's what he's studying in collage. I look at the letter sitting in my shaking hands and peel the seal off. This letter will determine if I get into UP! I slowly pull the paper out  hoping that it's an acceptance letter. I unfold the paper my long hair getting in my face, before I read it I look in the mirror above the fireplace and  take a look at my self, my hair  starting at light blond fading to red then to black, my eyes crystal blue and the freckles sitting over my light colored nose, this is me the real me, even if I don't make it in I'm still me I think to myself. Breathing deep I look down and read :
Dear Miss Sparks,
Here at UP all of us think you have amazing potential but this was not one of your best pieces, we've read several of your other writings  that you've posted online and they seem wonderful! We're sad to say that you did not revive a spot here at UP but if you wish for us to reconsider then you must re-write your pice and send it back in a months time.
We hope that you will re-write your story bc we would gladly accept you into our school with the right work.  We have so much talent at UP and we hope you will join our crowds.
The reason we didn't accept you work were bc of a few simply reasons, one reason is bc we didn't see you put your self in this story. It felt to us  like u didn't put much thought or effort into this piece. The topic was wonderful, the daughter of an all powerful god, her struggles seemed real but We wanted to be able to picture her as a real person and we couldn't, so please  consider writing a new piece.      
                                                               Thank you,
                                                            The UP Staff
I gasped and said quietly " one month only one month?" Coal grabbed my arm and took me the the couch sitting down I looked at my big brother hoping he would have the answer and said in his calming voice " This is your choice sis not mine."
My mom and dad were looking at me with sorrow in their eyes. I thought I'm still the same person I was before I opened the letter I can fix it. Taking a calming breath I said " what choice do I have? Getting into this school is so important to me. I want to be a writer more than anything." With that I got up and walked to my room shutting the door behind me and started working on my new writing piece.

AN* hey guys sry this chapter wasn't that long but please keep reading, the chapters will get longer and it will get better. Remember I'm still new to this! I'll update soon!