Writer's Book Award 2021 (Batch One)

Romance Results With Feedback

FEEDBACK:
The man in the reso is catchy, but the font is distracting; calligraphy lang kung calligraphy, gothic lang kung gothic. DO NOT embold dialogues dahil nagiging ka-skip-skip ang tags. Don't change pov every chapter din. Anyway, add to cart, edit mo lang ito.

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SenoritaBanez | Memoir of Reminiscence

Title [4/5]
Book cover [3/5]
Blurb [13/15]
Plot [19/25]
Grammar [8/10]
Written Style [11/15]
Overall [24/25]

Total: [82/100]

FEEDBACK:
Memoir (memwah! Char) of Reminiscence.
Ang ganda ng plot kaso ay predictable (para sa akin?), anyway it's a good idea and add to cart

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HannahRedspring | The Only Hope for Me is You

Title [3/5]
Book cover [3/5]
Blurb [12/15]
Plot [24/25]
Grammar [8/10]
Written Style [13/15]
Overall [22/25]

Total: [85/100]

FEEDBACK:
Tingnan not tignan tapos wala na, char. This is an add to cart, just make your "basics" more interesting and catchy.

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XandraaaZ | Roses

Title [4/5]
Book cover [3/5]
Blurb [12/15]
Plot [24/25]
Grammar [8/10]
Written Style [15/15]
Overall [24/25]

Total: [90/100]

FEEDBACK:
-Your title is simple yet it has deeper meaning, a common methapor for love? Beautiful yet thorny? Not so intriguing but it was enough to describe the plot.

-Book Cover isn't nice, too. Is it illustrated? Kung hindi, baka ma-report iyong story mo. Also, bakit may naka-calligraphy pa na version ng title tapos may simple text pa, para tuloy feeling ko, dalawa 'yong words ng title mo.

-Blurb isn't intriguing, too, mali rin iyong pagkakagawa ng structure if based ito sa traditional blurb. Mas better kung ganito . . .

"Chelsea Ledeunya Mandell, an ex-model who lacks confidence, and her chu-chu . . ."

State mo rin 'yong glimpse of plot, and bigay ng stakes.

-Plot, I can say it's cliché, gamit na 'to pero bago 'yong way mo of telling.

-Some sentences are grammatically incorrect, minsan ay parang pilit 'yong construction. Better if you'll stick to a language na sanay ka kaysa pilitin.

-Writing Style. You nailed this part. I really loved the characters (Adi and Chelsea lang, ayoko kay Liam). Also, I enjoyed reading the chapters without skimming any part of it— I swear. Napapa-comment nga ako minsan e!

-Overall, I can see the effort of the author, from how she tries to perfect her techs and grammar. How she writes the dialogue, and deliver the flow freely.

Bonus (since I loved the story), simple evalution and techs:

PROLOGUE scene is a clichéic way on starting a Romance novel. Please, make it a little bit . . . unique? But I liked na nakasikreto kung sino 'yong lalaki, ha?

Also, sa may part na kita raw 'yong fear sa mata ni guy? Can't it be shown more? Na nanlaki 'yong mata niya. Nanginig ang tuhod, or the likes?

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