ElizaSophia

@YuffieProductions that's perfectly fine, I know exactly where you're coming from. While compliments are great - they're not going to help the story get better (I'm not saying your story needs work... I just understand where you're coming from... But expect me to work a compliment into the constructive criticism somehow hehe) 

YuffieProductions

Thanks so much for the comment! No problem that it's not critiquing. Sometimes it's good to know what you're doing correctly, too. ^__^ 
          
          I'm glad you find Hero to have depth! During the beginning chapters, everyone would comment how Hero was too perfect and flat, and I had to keep telling them to keep reading. xP He seemed perfect because he knows how to act perfect. It was terribly difficult to hold my tongue. I just wanted to yell out: HE'S A FLIPPING PSYCHOPATH. HE IS NOT PERFECT. 
          Anyway, thanks again, and yes, time bomb is a perfect likeness. xD

ElizaSophia

@YuffieProductions that's perfectly fine, I know exactly where you're coming from. While compliments are great - they're not going to help the story get better (I'm not saying your story needs work... I just understand where you're coming from... But expect me to work a compliment into the constructive criticism somehow hehe)