You've Got That One Thing

9 Part Story 4K Reads 52 Votes
Paola Garcia By Pao_Direction Completed
Just a regular girl from Arizona goes on a hike one day and little did she know that she would find THE guy with that one thing she was looking for. She also never would have imagine that he, Zayn Malik would feel the same exact way for her.  And in the process of their relationship she becomes very close friends with his mates, Louis, Liam, Harry and Niall. Will this love story last, is this the real thing? <3
Yeah, you should write it like that :) 
                                    
                                    BUT! Otherwise, very good!!! :D
@Pao_Malik Like this: 
                                    
                                    Liam: Hiya
                                    Zayn: Hey. 
                                    
                                    I write like this.
                                    
                                    'Hiya,' said Liam, happily.
                                    'Hey,' Zayn replied, his voice monotone.
Heya! I think it's an awesome story so far, may I offer some critical feedback? If you want to get your story read, I suggest pitting a description and I just feel, a lot of people don't like reading in script form. That's just my opinion :) it's still awesome :)