Good story line but as the other people have said, some of your sentences need to be fixed up. Otherwise a good story.
This is amazing! I can't believe you're 12 and wrote something like this! :D This is really sad but hopefully he'll have a happy ending :)
Hey, this is good. Very interesting. And l agreee with everyone under me, Lol. Upload soon!!
This is great!(: It's interesting and differant and has a good twist in it! Keep writing!!! 'Voted'
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