HONESTLY, I HAVE NOTHING TO SAY.
Okay I lied.
It's really good! The description rocks, punctuation rocks, the beginning is catchy. There's only spacing errors you might want to check out. Also, I like the pace. It's easy to follow.
You asked me, all the way in 2012:
"Is this story worth continuing?"
The answer:
Heck yes.
~Julian
Date: 24 June 2014
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