Sorry it's so late! School started so, yea.xP
Things I didn't like:
*Your detail is good. You just have to find a way not to get them all mixed up with past and present tenses. Sometimes it was a bit confusing.
Things I did like:
*Your trailer. Even though the readers were thrown into the action (Which is actullay really cool by the way.) You managed to find a way to slow everything down and still keep your level of suspence.
*You used Candice Acola as your character "Mallory" I personally think she was a great choice just because, she's the person I would think to see ghosts. :D It really adds some mystery.
*Overall, I give this a 4/5 star rating you can stll fix a few things but, other than that great job.:)
