Hello again. So, when are we getting married?

Hello again. So, when are we getting married?

12.7K Reads 209 Votes 9 Part Story
Leanne By Sebaschan Updated Mar 17, 2012

Alexis Khayzer's grandfather's last will pretty much decided her love life for her, by making her marry his best friend's grandson! Alexis grew up with her childhood bestfriend -slash- soon to be husband, daniel. But due to her dad's work, she had to move to california at age 7, and say goodbye to danny- for now. fast forward 10 years later, alexis is now 17, and has the perfect normal life of being a mogul's daughter and popular cheerleader. But that all changes when Daniel's family moves to new york. Daniel turns out to be the perfect guy, the only problem is, he doesn't believe in love! Add a jealous guy best friend and the king of high school dying to go out with her to the picture, it all adds up to chaos! What's a bride to be to do?

tianajade tianajade Feb 06, 2011
Great! Just a few of your names need to be capitalised (: Keep writing!
MommyMagic MommyMagic Feb 06, 2011
I vote for you to keep writing.  You've got two great characters.  Mom and Dad problems, distance to overcome and a sweet friendship to rekindle.  The story doesn't have to be long to be good- but you do need a well defined problem to overcome.  So- on with it!  And have fun!
Kugelmonkey Kugelmonkey Feb 05, 2011
Nooo, whatever are you talking about? This story's wonderful! And you can't end it here either! I need to see how it ends. You're an amazing story-teller, my dear. (: Can't wait for the next upload. :DD
Kugelmonkey Kugelmonkey Feb 05, 2011
I like it. Good character progression, mood and pace. Yes, some grammatical errors, but completely understandable. I like this so far. :D
MommyMagic MommyMagic Feb 04, 2011
Voted!  Hope to hear more from you . . . as a writer and a reader!
                              
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tianajade tianajade Feb 04, 2011
Great beginning! I like how you had a flash back, and that you made it in italics. Your writing flows nicely. This definitely has potential to be a good story! Great job, keep writing! ;D *Voted and added to Library*