Sweet Envy

3 Part Story 373 Reads 18 Votes
rainbow101xo By rainbow101xo Updated a year ago
Alyssa was always the inquisitive type, she always found herself in other peoples business whether she wanted to be or not. After a new transfer student from England shows his face in her high school she’s mesmerized by his beauty and quiet, inconspicuous personality. Despite peoples warning Alyssa tries to get to know this mysterious, sexy, shadowy stranger, but could his secret be enough to send her running? Alyssa finds herself dealing with a whole new world of immortality, blood, thirst and horror. Despite her uncontrollable, overpowering feelings for this boy she can’t help but think this time she’s gotten herself into something beyond her capabilities and sanity. This boy could be her saviour or her bloodthirsty demise.
PaganLou PaganLou 2 years ago
I really like this! Alot! (: Its a great chappie & I love her name & the cover of the book! Its a really good start!
h8lyfeee h8lyfeee 2 years ago
Great chapter and writing style. I like Alyssa's character :) A tip though. On the last page, please put spaces between long paragraphs. They look boring and hard to read. Hope that helps!
AnnabelleSmithson AnnabelleSmithson 2 years ago
Good start. The descriptions were pretty good too and your introduction of main character was written nicely. Although, I'm not much into Vampire stuff I think this was well written :)

Voted.
AAWilson AAWilson 2 years ago
Lol is he real? Lol I like this. Like the description nf I think u introduced the main character well. All in all it was a great chapter :))