randomwritess

Guys I’m thinking about changing Marcella up slightly. Now I want to hear thoughts on this though as we aren’t getting anywhere the way it is now.
          	
          	I want to fully go through and redo it, maybe slight changes to the storyline. Making things seem more realistic and making sure I’ve got things mentioned when and where they need to be so it flows better.
          	
          	I’m working on some new chapters for lots of things around this. One being some flashback chapters as other than knowing Marcella had a bad past you and I both don’t really know how she grew up after being five other than it was bad.
          	
          	And is it just me or does it seem like Savio has no personality, I just can’t seem to like get him? I don’t even know what I was going for with him if I’m being honest. 
          	
          	And the fact I wrote the first ten chapters in two days says a lot I think- although I was constantly thinking about writing this story weeks before I started it.
          	
          	And there’s also the minor fact that the time line in the story is like two weeks but hey who’s counting right? - but on a serious note I do plan to sort that. - in the never coming future lol. 
          	
          	Anyways what do you think?
          	
          	I’d love any feedback you guys have good and bad :)

JamaicaDomincel

@randomwritess please update marcella
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dusty_bawls_2-0

I think changing it a bit and making it more realistic would definitely bring a lot of the story together :) and the Savio not having much personality is pretty true lol. love him but he is kinda confusing with his personality just like you said I don’t get him either 
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randomwritess

Guys I’m thinking about changing Marcella up slightly. Now I want to hear thoughts on this though as we aren’t getting anywhere the way it is now.
          
          I want to fully go through and redo it, maybe slight changes to the storyline. Making things seem more realistic and making sure I’ve got things mentioned when and where they need to be so it flows better.
          
          I’m working on some new chapters for lots of things around this. One being some flashback chapters as other than knowing Marcella had a bad past you and I both don’t really know how she grew up after being five other than it was bad.
          
          And is it just me or does it seem like Savio has no personality, I just can’t seem to like get him? I don’t even know what I was going for with him if I’m being honest. 
          
          And the fact I wrote the first ten chapters in two days says a lot I think- although I was constantly thinking about writing this story weeks before I started it.
          
          And there’s also the minor fact that the time line in the story is like two weeks but hey who’s counting right? - but on a serious note I do plan to sort that. - in the never coming future lol. 
          
          Anyways what do you think?
          
          I’d love any feedback you guys have good and bad :)

JamaicaDomincel

@randomwritess please update marcella
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dusty_bawls_2-0

I think changing it a bit and making it more realistic would definitely bring a lot of the story together :) and the Savio not having much personality is pretty true lol. love him but he is kinda confusing with his personality just like you said I don’t get him either 
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