DeusExLogica

@TheLastFallenAngel We understand

JackPagliante

Thanks again for your comments, most appreciated! The first five or so chapters I'm completely redoing, even before you commented, just because when I was reading them briefly over, I was overwhelmed by the number of plot holes I had written in. But thanks for the comments, and I will take them into consideration when rewriting.

JackPagliante

Thanks for the comment. I know I have to fix the adverbs, but I'm still writing it and I'm just trying to get through, and then I'll fix it up after. And with Visir and Ioden, it may seem a little foggy about them, but in the next chapter it kind of explains who they are and what kind of relationship they have. But thanks again for the comment.