Ciera_Iris_Cachet

What really gets under my skin is when some generic writer steals my books ideas and tries to spin it off like they had some magical udea on their own. Dude not cool! Btw you sucj at writing don't care how many read your trashy novel.

Ciera_Iris_Cachet

"Okay?" Sayde didn't feel at ease something about the way those E-Qoy looked at her, haunted her, but she hadn't a clue why.
          
             An icy chill shot down Sayde's spine, she folded her arms around herself briskly rubbing off the goose bumps. The lighting slightly flickered in the distance before her and Laran, casting a shadow over their steps. A second room appeared to the right, Laran lead her through it. It was a oval in shape, and very cheerfully decored, and brightly lit.  A man and one woman stood behind a desk, eyes fixed and silently watching them. Their faces looked empty, the blue Eco-skin uniforms covered nearly every inch of skin. Only their faces were exposed, they began to smile an unnatural unearthly smile as though it pained them. Their eyes flickered, and shifted back and forth towards the exit.
          
             "Who are they?"
          
             "Oh, they are the welcoming party for new comers like yourself."
          
             "Cheery, I feel welcome already."

Ciera_Iris_Cachet

Down into a maze a small room stood to the left. A few people stood about eating, drinking, and talking calmly. They were dressed elegantly, the light hum of their voices came to a hult as Sayde and Laran entered. The air smelled savory, rich, and but made Saydes' mouth watered a tad. The rooms floor was shaped in a tear drop, the walls were made from Coral, shells embedded into them. The ceiling emanated blue and was crystal, and clear. It held flowing water that trickled down ever wall methodically.  Seating was both at a full bar faceted in pearls of many colors, and a long oblong dinning table in the center of the room.
          
            "This is a place you can eat when you are invited, only when you are invited!  it is for private dinning."
          
            The E-Qoy sitting eating stared at General Laran and Sayde accusingly and silently. Like to say be gone peasants! You have no business here. Or get out now!!!
          
             Sayde could see the E-Qoys' Eco-Skins turning black and red.
          
             "Why were they angry?" Sayde puzzled, but moved on swiftly following Laran.
          
             "A shift will happen soon we must be at your new Quarters or it will be night before we reach it."
          
             "Okay?" Sayde didn't feel at ease something about the way those E-Qoy looked at her,  haunted her, but she hadn't a clue why.

Ciera_Iris_Cachet

made some adjustments to "The E-Qoy" story..to improve it's luster. Re-read and tell me what you think. I will be putting the final touches on Chapter One in the next few days. I really hope to bring out this story to it's fullest. As I said before the Idea came from a HORRIFIC NIGHTMARE I had. I've never been more scared in my life..and for me being scared is a very difficult thing. 
          <3 Ciera <3

braidedcurls

@Ciera_Iris_Cachet I started teading this story a few minutes ago. I got to the end and it said 'Unfinished' and I said 'Nooo'. I'm intrigued with this story and how you write in great detail. I can envision it all clearly. I would like to read this story in its entirety even if its chapter by chapter as you finish them. If this is from a nightmare then you have some pretty awsome imaginative dreams. Please let me know when when you begin to post full chapters. I will keep this book in my library. Thank you, : )
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