faiktheintelligent
hi can you please read my story the Avery paradox and tell me how it is. I'm currently writing it.
Alex_Tazer
@faiktheintelligent your book has an interesting idea. But it was kinda confusing. Paragraph types are rare but normally they describe a chain of events that shows a character's growth. Yours doesn't really feel like its showing that. Plus the line, his head 'pained' seems repetitive. That's just my opinion.