This is really captivating for a beginning. It got me hooked on I actually thought it was well written :)
:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D Nice XD DINOSAUR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :3
I like the concept, but it seems a little rushed. I guess it IS the prologue, so we shall see. *voted*
I think you should make you story longer by adding more details, otherwise your story is really interesting.
Add to your private library
My LibraryAdd this story to your public reading lists