With No Warning (Romance/Inspirational)(Complete)

25 Part Story 123K Reads 1.6K Votes
stained_glasses By stained_glasses Completed
The last thing she expected was to seek shelter in a freezer, with a handsome stranger, while a tornado ripped the roof from above her head. Dakota survives the twister, but in the days to come, will her heart survive the emotional twister of Evan, her hot freezer mate, on that fateful day?
AliyahJanae AliyahJanae 7 months ago
Good descriptions, but the narration feels a tad detached from what Dakota is experiencing. Maybe rethink some word choices.
UniquelyMemorable UniquelyMemorable a year ago
Your writing is beautifully crafted and not too wordy. I appreciate that.
LastxKingsxQueen LastxKingsxQueen 2 years ago
I honestly don't know exactly why, but I can't read this.
I think the way you have written in 3rd person was too... matured? I found it tedious to read.

I mean no offence.
WendyWrites WendyWrites 2 years ago
@stained_glasses Oh that is sad!! 

Have been a little buried this week...but I'm hoping to read more of this one tonight or tomorrow...i really want to see where it goes from here! I should be commenting on chapters later!! =c]
Sara_Elizabeth1990 Sara_Elizabeth1990 2 years ago
Great first chapter! The details you put into it made me feel like I was really there :D
SamHayler SamHayler 2 years ago
You really paint a detailed picture with your descriptions. I felt as if I could visualise the scene with little effort, because your vocabulary is so perfect that all the pieces fit together. I really haven't a bad word to say xD