This is really good. It gives suspense. As this is very short a snappy (a good thing), there isn't really anything to improve on. :) Nice work.
I thought the description you gave me when you requested a cover seemed really interesting so I decided to read this story :D
Ahh, what a chilling premise - especially since 2040 really isn't that far off! I actually think Avory Hewes sounds rather pretty :)
@live_yuh_life Very cool! I'll add this to my library so I can be sure I won't miss it:) GOOD LUCK!!!
Aw, that's kinda sad. I like her name.....really like where this is going! I think it was a lot of potential:) KEEP WRITING!!!
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