Animepunkwolfgirl16 seems to be an aspiring writer who deserves a lot more credit for what she writes.
Anyway back to the story. We find a girl (don’t know her name yet) strolling along the border of the Indian lake. There *surprise surprise* she sees a washed up boy who seems to be unconscious. I already know after reading the title she is going to find a boy in a lake. From there she takes him home to get help from her grandparents. * I am going to stop with the plot as I do not want to give anything away to someone who has not read it*.
Overall this story could become better with some editing. There are a few grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes.
E.g. Brake her right hip *wrong*
Break her right hip *right!*
This story though does have a good plot and with some work could become a great story.
With a bit more editing I think you will find the outcome rewarding.
Keep up the great work Animepunkwolfgirl16!
Butterfly224 <3 x
