So I saw your new rough sketch and I think it is TRULY AMAZING. But there is some advice I can give (Actually only one drawing):
In your drawing, you were trying to reach a shocked, shaken (SHOOKETH) expression. Moonpie's face was good, but her body seems too straight to be shaken.
Here's, what I think, a shaken body:
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Take this as a constructive criticism. I don't intend to make you upset.
