I reviewed your book Trouble Maker.
Now I understand it's your first book, but as someone who wants to help you, I'd rather just tell you what I think.
I did like your first sentence. It was a good grab - however, maybe you should change "jail" to "juvenile hall." Why? Well... at seventeen you're still considered as a kid and for those under eighteen, they go to Juvenile Hall instead of jail. Now I'm not sure if you're from another country and they have it differently, but the first thing that came to my mind was that jail would be for adults and not for seventeen year old kids. Just pointing out.
"In the side of Walmart..." it kind of just sounds like it was in the "No Parking Zone." So if I'm correct, you should probably reword it to "on the inside of Walmart." Maybe describe it a little bit more without going into too much detail, so the reader doesn't exactly get confused. So we'll just say: Somehow my car ended up on the inside of Walmart... twice, to be exact. With the large gaping hole on the side, I can't imagine I'm not even dead or injured in a way by going through some tough bricks.
Just because it's a small pet peeve of mine, "you're" is supposed to be "your" on that second paragrpah. Remember that "you're" is you are.
Don't do the "ding" words... Trust me, people get annoyed with those words that are used in description. So instead, just say: The bell begins to ring a couple times and as I get up from my seat, Mr. Sampler gestures his fingers for me to come to his desk.
When you're using thoughts such as: Yes! I get out of here! - remember to put them in Italics.
You've missed a couple commas and periods, but those can be fixed in a jiffy.
Instead of putting the words "What" in CAPS and using many question and exlcamation marks, just write it normally with a question mark and then in narration, you can use the words you put: I yelled.
Do put more description in with the dialogue scenes. Like reactions, actions, or thoughts, or even all three!
I do think it is best if the mother told her instead of the teacher, unless Mr. Sampler is her father... I just think it's unrealistic for him to say something like that because it's personal. Now if the mother was there with them, then you can say so. But I think that the teacher should call her up to his desk and say goodbye or what not, and then when she gets to the front, her mother will be there maybe in the car or in the principle's office, and then tells her.
Even though the plot sounds a bit cliche, I think it has a potential! (:
So there's your review - I'm also glad you've been increasing your reads, so that's good your first goal succeeded. :)
