Hello:)
Book: Dynamite
By: BTSOT7GURlKIMMY
Judge: Dragon_Kitara
Title: 2/5
The title is just the name of a song by our boys, and make no other connections with the oneshot.
Cover: 6/10
Aesthetic, yet doesn't do much about the story.
Description: 7/10
It looks fine!
First impression: 5/10
It was a very common topic you chose to write on, there are about 100 books on the 8th member of BTS.
You tried your best, but there were enormous punctuation errors, a few tense faults too.
Writing style: 6/10
It is good, but pretty bland. The words don't have enough intensity to hold a reader, it felt monotonous.
Character's action and decisions: 8/10
They were fine, but often felt pretty pushy.
Plot: 10/20
It was like reading a diary about BTS with one more member. There wasn't anything exceptional or hooking, and that decreased the intensity and charm.
Explanation: 3/5
You did good, but I won't read it. It does not pique my interest.
Sense: 5/10
I don't know what to say...
Grammar and vocab: 5/10
Punctuation, lower case and upper case... They are too many. Proofreading is necessary.
Total: 57/100
Judge: Mae_writes_08
Title: 5/5
Cover: 8/10
Description: 9/10
First impression: 9/10
Writing style: 10/10
Character's actions and decisions: 9/10 Plot: 20/20
Explanation: 5/5
Sense: 10/10
Grammar, spelling and vocabulary: 9/10
Total: 94/100
Title: It just suited the book cause the book was really a dynamite!
Cover: I wish it could be
more creatively made Description: what else needed to be added in a one-shot book's description? The description was good! First impression: it was confusing at first but later at the 1st chapter did understood tho
Writing style: it was simple and good
Characters- They detailed
every actions of the
characters which I really appreciate
Plot- Great Plot really! Explanation: They explained so beautifully and that everyone could understand Sense: It was so perfect Grammar- Good
Total was 94 and it does worth the story :)
Total: 57+94=151
Average: 75.5
Bonus: +7
Grand Total: 82.5
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Book: One Last Hug
By: Zandra996
Judge: Dragon_Kitara
Title: 4/5
A bit common but fits your plot
Cover : 6/10
A little messy. A better picture with a sadder tone could have been used. Your subtitles and messing the picture up. Can your fonts
Description: 7/10
Can be more descriptive and creative. Give a little more detail into what the story is about.
First impression: 6/10
Not very intriguing. To be honest I thought she was writing a suicide letter to a boyfriend or someone she wanted to date but couldn’t
Writing style: 7/10
Can be more descriptive and creative. Your plot is common so you need to spice it up
Characters action and decisions: 7/10
Could have explained the character’s decision more. Like why they were talking like that. Explain more in detail what was going on and your characters felt
Plot: 16/20
Its giving of 13 reasons why vibes. Like I said it seems more like her suicide note to a lover not her last words to her older brother. You need to be more descriptive and tell your readers the relationship between the two. You need to add more emotions in your characters
Explanation: 3/5
Can be explained better and more descriptive
Sense: 8/10
Some parts didn’t make sense due to less deception and fast pace
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary: 8/10
Add more to your vocabulary. You have a few grammar errors that you need to edit.
Total : 72/100
Judge: JiMochi_Fictions
Title- 5/5: simple and most suitable
Cover - 7/10: could've been soft rather than flashy
Description 9/10: short and effective
first impression - 9/10: Emotional and interesting
Writing Style- 10/10 - it's rare to see chapters being less than 100 words but still are effective, the short chapters were so worth it
Character actions and decision- 10/10 - Chef's kiss
Plot 20/20: Rare to something which isn't love story and on top of that the emotions this one has....
Explanation 4/5: quite simple but effectively clean and understandable
Sense- 10/10 - shows part of reality about how one shouldn't hold grudges for something we didn't had control on
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary - 9/10 - under editing, but doesn't has much errors.
Total: 93/100
Total: 72+93=165
Average: 82.5
Bonus: No bonus because you are not following your judges
Grand Total: 82.5
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Book: Never Let Go
By: Nefelibatas_world
Judge: _WildStar_
Title: 5/5
Cover: 10/10
Description: 6/10
First Impression: 6/10
Writing Style: 8/10
Characters actions and decisions: 6/10
Plot: 11/20
Explanation: 2/5
Sense: 8/10
Spellings, grammar and vocab: 8/10
Total: 70/100
The description is very long and entering each member’s line when they all say the same isn’t interesting, so you have to opt for a different idea for your blurb. Everything went too fast,the emotions were appreciable but just like the titanic the speed of the emotions were also fast, the plot was simply laid on 1 element, which you cut, pasted from what you were inspired and gave the book an happy ending, except that there were no exciting elements as you have went for a OT7 it is very easy to guess that next is going to be a rom with a member until climax comes. But significantly other characters played their characters very well. You have done a very good job, fly high
Judge: Cococream_Maristy
Title- 4/5
Cover- 6/10
Description- 7/10
First Impression- 10/10
Writing Style- 10/10
Character action and decisions- 7/10
Plot- 19/20
Explanation- 5/5
Sense- 5/10
Grammer, Spelling and Vocab- 8/10
Total: 81/100
Title- There could have been a better title, a title that fits the story better. The current one is great too btw.
Cover- The Never Let Go is not really visible, though it's a really great cover. I first thought of giving a 9, but then I noticed that the cover looks messy if u see from top, so I decided to give it a 7, then I also noticed that the 'Never' was not visible so finally I gave it a 6.
Description- It's not attractive. Or u can say, it won't attract readers. The paragraphs should be long sentences, by that I mean instead of writing the whole in paragraph, write it like this-
~The scars and and wounds, engraved intro Violet's heart by the ones she was supposed to love~
How was she supposed to love them when they were the ones she'd always hated?
Leave lines in between, and add comas, ~ and ° alot.
First Impression- I've judged mang books before, but I felt the most attached to this one. The few chapters held emotions, and that attracted me. My expectations became high with the story, which rarely happens even when I'm not judging.
Writing style- I've got nothing much to say, but the writing is really beautiful. You didn't try to add many sentences in one single paragraphs, just the right number.
Character actions and decisions- The characters weren't idiots, but over-reactive. That's what I didn't like. Also I've been neutral with this one for really long, here atleast the characters weren't making moves which makes no sense.
Plot- I've got nothing much to say about this either, one thing- i liked it.
Explanation- You explained really nicely and that's what matters, I appreciate that.
Sense- I didn't mention it in Characters actions and Decisions but there were some things which didn't make sense at all. Like after YN runs from the marriage hall, there isn't chaos at all. Some characters Overreact, while others underreact. Also, there wasn't an explanation on what teh bride groom did afterwards, it makes no sense.
Grammer, Spelling, vocabulary- Finally someone who actually knows the language and didn't fill random words with no sense! I've read so many books where the Grammer was completely wrong, or some part was wrong, but here, it was all correct. You just gotta proof read it once. Also the thing that made me the happiest is the fact you didn't push what everyone said in the same paragraph, which means that your Grammer was correct, while others make this mistake alot. Ur supposed to write what someone else said in a different paragraph or readers can get confused about who actually is saying that, but in the story it wasn't a problem.
Total: 70+81=151
Average: 75.5
Bonus: +7
Grand Total: 82.5
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Book: Made For Each Other
By: Kookiezz_girl
Judge: JiMochi_Fictions
Title- 5/5
Suits the plot well
Cover - 7/10
too common, could've been better bit considering the main lead's character it somehow suits.
Description 9/10
simple and cute
First impression - 8/10
the blurb was indeed intriguing and as I went on I couldn't stop reading ahead.
Writing Style- 9/10
chapters were simple, not too short neither too long they seemed enough, good cliffhangers.
Character actions and decision- 10/10 - Honestly I was on my toes all till the end, it's so damn good.
Plot- 19/20
Random and little common but also unique
Explanation- 4/5
clean and understandable
Sense- 10/10
the tension, the emotions, the actions, everything were in sync and made perfect sense
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary - 9/10
Minor issues here and there apart from that everything is good.
Total: 91/100
Judge: cypherbangtan
Title [ 5/5 ] Title suits the story very well! Although, this is a very common title, it suits the theme of your story. I loved it when you used it at the right place, at the right time.
Cover [ 8/10 ] Your cover looks neat, but you should work on making it more appealing part. Covers (after your plot and execution) is the most important part of your book. The text in the cover gives off a rather different vibe I can't quite put my finger on. You can visit any graphic shop. Or you can simply, edit out a picture of the male protagonist standing in the middle with cameras around him (theme of your book) and OC somewhere in the cover. A light theme cover, covering all the important elements will highlight your book well.
First Impression [ 8/10 ] Cover is a bit bland. Title is interesting. First impressions of the book was that it's a friends to lovers au and I enjoyed it very much. You did a good job in adding twists although they were a little predictible but I enjoyed it!
Writing Style [ 8/10 ] You did good in the way you presented your plot, but you can make it a little neat. I understood the part where italic was for flashbacks, and how words in uppercase meant that characters were screaming, but you should try to avoid the latter. It makes it all look messy.
Character Actions and Decisions [ 5/10 ] Characters were good. But their actions and decisions the complete opposite. Beginning for most friends to lovers trope, starts with infatuation that grows into something massive. The female protagonist had feelings, she never confessed, male protagonist was confused because why this jealousy etcetera. Character of Kim Nayeon confused me. It was hard to wrap my head around many incidents happening in the book influenced by character's decision.
Plot [18/20] I have read a lot of stories, all of which have friends to lovers trope. Your plot was good, some elements in your plot were really nice. You had a good female protagonist who was somewhat rational. The Epilogue, intrigued me. Marriage? Wow. The plot had a good pace, but at the end things just rushed in. A little bit of time given to character could have made it a bit realistic, but it's alright, it looks decent this way too.
Explanation [ 5/5 ] You explained things really well. I really loved the epilogue for emotions were reflecting in the words beautifully. Made for each other- the title, explained itself to me at the very end.
Sense [ 10/10 ] Plot made sense! I don't know what to write more in this.
Grammar, Spellings and Vocabulary [8/10] I saw grammatical errors, and a lot of spelling errors too. You can go back and re-read those chapter. Not only that, you can also take help from various apps like Grammarly which helps in identifying various errors. Vocabulary was near, however you can always try to play with words!
Ending notes : I am so sorry if any part of this review demotivated you or made you feel uncomfortable. This is your book, your masterpiece and I am no one to judge it, however I can point out a little things that can be changed for better. Thank you so much for sharing your work<3
Total : 81/100
Total: 90+81=171
Average: 85.5
Bonus: No bonus because you are not following your judges
Grand Total: 85.5
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Book: ANECTODES: BANGTAN ONESHOTS
By: inky_jin
Judge: Dragon_Kitara
Title: 5/5
It’s different from other oneshot names. It’s really uncommon
Cover: 8/10
Fits your book well. You can tone your background down a bit and make the font a bit more clearer.
Description: 8/10
Can be more intriguing
First impression: 9/10
This was a lot different from other one shots I have read. Its really intriguing the way you wrote each chapter making me want to read more.
Writing style: 10/10
Very creative with the way you incorporated the lyrics into each chapter
Characters action and decisions: 9/10
You can feel and picture what the characters where doing and feeling which got my attention. Some parts did get abit confusing as the pace was a little too fast
Plot: 19/20
This is the first time I have seen someone use lyrics in their books the way you did. You told a story that fitted well with the song chosen. Each chapter had a different vibe to it due to the songs that was used which was very intriguing and creative.
Explanation: 4/5
Some parts could have been slower paced and more details
Sense: 9/10
Some chapters the pace seems rushed which caused a scene to be confusing as you read on. Other than that you with how descriptive you were they made a lot of sense
Spelling, grammar and vocabulary: 9/10
Few typos and grammar error. Not much
Total: 90/100
Judge: StarV07
Title : Title must be something else. 1/5
Cover: Okay. 5/10
Description: Nothing describe about the story. 2/10
First impression: Quite attractive. 9/10
Writing style: Nice. 8/10
Characters actions and Decisions : Realistic. 7/10
Plot : Well built plot. 15/20
Explanation: Nicely explain points. 5/5
Sense : Proper, good going. 7/10
Grammer, Spelling & Vocabs: Damn proper 10/10
Total: 69/100
Total: 90+69=159
Average: 79.5
Bonus: +7
Grand Total: 86.5
Bye:)