Such a sense of melancholy. Perfectly pictured traveller slowing down at the end of a long day, that most beautiful time of all, dusk...
I hate Jakarta :P ~especially the traffic and the heat.
but I do like your writing style ^_^d
Where's the next poem?? **grins**
@allenlau that's a very pretty city... i don't live in rio .. my dad used to tho :)
@allenlau Well, Vegas is probably a lot closer to where I live than Jakarta, since I have no idea where /that/ is xD
wow though i've never actually been to jakarta, i think you've capture it's essence perfectly.
@allenlau - glad you don't mind a little critique. Please feel free to take apart any of mine in critical retribution :-)
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