I personally think that this was a nice chapter. Maybe good for it to be chapter one!
I understand why you would hate the prologue, but usually prologues are never good. They only help start the story up.
I like it a lot! I'll continue it asap, but first i have to finish up my reading list!
Apart from a few grammar mistakes, you write pretty well and have good plot ideas! :)
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