Spider Bites Are Supposed to Give You Super Powers

5 Part Story 488 Reads 12 Votes
laughthencarryon By laughthencarryon Updated 2 years ago
A story a highs and lows, ups and downs, triumph and failed attemps, but mostly the story of Jessimen Upton, a girl who's life was turned upside down after one little run in with a spider. Sorry for the overly dramatic description! Read ;)
ZsaYad ZsaYad 2 years ago
I liked your first chapter. Definitely reading on. Your intro before teh first chapter could use some work though. You might want to leave out who this character is entirely until you get into the story. The intro is to entice your reader.
This is So cool. I really like'd the prologue it sucked me right in. Very detailed. Keep up the good work, and good luck on your book. :) 
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