It would be better if you used speech marks and corrected your spelling mistakes. The story is good though. :P
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AAAARGGHHH YOU NEED TO USE CAPITAL LETTERS!!!!!!! PLEASE SPARE ME THE i's IT'S FLIPPING 'I'!!!! THIS IS SO FRUSTRATING.
Oh annnnd BUY A BLOODY DICTIONARY. I'm almost positive that the word 'with' is not spelled 'wiht'. OKAY? OKAY.
No offense buuuut... THERE ARE THESE THINGS CALLED QUOTATIONS YOU SHOULD BLOODY USE THEM. THANKYOUVERYMUCH
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