WHEN HISTORY,MYSTERY,LOVE STORY COMBINE WITH A TINGE OF MAGIC it brews up a deadly cocktail like this one...
very cool idea :) just some cleaning up, grammar and stuff and it should be great! i really like the idea.
its a good start. love the Inheritence cycle and i'm sure i'm going to love this too. voted!
Hmm it needs some editing done to it, and maybe some detailed description of whats happening, especially in your dialogue :) cool xx
Good beginning, just need to straighten out the creases and it should be perfect :D love the idea and it's very original xx
If its anything to do with the inheritence cycle then its something to do with me ............................ awesome writting.
Okay, this was pretty short a chapter. You might want to slow down a bit - you're rushing a lot.
Plan a blueprint as to how to progress and stick to it! Don't use ?? or !!! %@* and stuff like that, it looks really bad! Try and read some books online and grasp their writing styles.