Risky Temptations

4 Part Story 511 Reads 23 Votes
hello679 By hello679 Updated 2 years ago
Jen has everything going for her; a great boyfriend, a great best friend, poularity, good grades, a bright future, but will a new guy at school change all of that?

Author's note: Please comment on what you think! or opinions on what u think shud happen next, and stuff like that. thanks!!!
kAckRssI kAckRssI 2 years ago
Great story! It's a great start. I just hope that as you go on with the story you'll make the chapters longer
DesLovexx DesLovexx 2 years ago
The tenses are a bit mixed up, which well it happens. I get confused between them too! :) You have a great idea of the story, and I think maybe a bit more description would be good? Great start, honestly! Voted x
meccabartin meccabartin 2 years ago
Awww. This is seriously cute, the interactions between both couples. & The fact that all four of them are friends with each other is also very adorable! Love it! :)
raindrops_ raindrops_ 2 years ago
I like the interactions between your characters. Several grammatical errors found-- I hope you can edit them. :)
xLauraAnne xLauraAnne 2 years ago
This is a really nice start to this story, and I really like that it's in first person. The descriptions are good. Overall it's pretty good. I may actually continue reading this. (:
WhiteNoisePhantom WhiteNoisePhantom 2 years ago
I liked it, short but to the point a good quality in my opinion. Good work