I really liked how you put action in the first page, and it kind of hooked me ;) I would love to read more - will you continue updating?
You started off really strong. It immediately grabbed my attention and pulled me in :) Overall you seem to have a pretty unique plot developing! :D
Good start. I really love this, and am attached.. I really love the cover, and the characters. The details and characters were well described. Well done.
Off to a good start. Sorry, I know that was how Pictures_For_Annipel started it, but its true! I realy liked it, great job
Wow. That was really good could were very descriptive,,which I liked :) you never can have too much description :) and you kept it a bit suspenseful :)
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