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“I like nonsense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living.” 
― Dr. Seuss
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    4 years ago

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3 Published Works

Featured work.

The Bag Lady

Social data: 283 reads. 21 votes. 26 comments.

Description: There is always more than meets the eye. Do we dare see it, though?


Other Works by fuzzypenguin.
Mirror Mirror Beautiful

Mirror Mirror Beautiful

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Outer beauty has become such a big part of our lives nowadays. For some, it becomes an obsession: 'Do I...

Hear the Rain Fall

Hear the Rain Fall

167 20 34

Rain, rain, rain.

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fuzzypenguin
I am going to start with saying that your ending has a perfect hook to it. Although not a particularly favourite genre of mine, you got me wanting to go ahead and click on the next chapter. And who knows, after writing this comment, I just might! 
      
      Furthermore, you have a very elegant way of writing that is not only easy to follow and understand but also sits well with a person. That being said however, I wish before this introduction there was something else so that it doesn't feel rushed. So that instead of an explanation to lead us to the next chapter, it feels like the unraveling of a story. Perhaps by providing some sort of description of scenery or a conversation between people at the beginning would tie everything in together.
      
      Regardless of that however, it's a great start! :)