The Demon Kings Mate (Book 1)#wattys2015

The Demon Kings Mate (Book 1)#wattys2015

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CjAlter By CjAlter Completed

*Dark Lust Series *
It was eight p.m. and oddly my house was dark, I got an eerie chill as I unlocked the front door.

 I stepped inside and struggled to find the light switch and someone cleared there throat.

"Do not be alarmed."The man replied.

"Says the shadowy figure in my living room." I snorted.

 He clicked on the light switch next to the couch and it revealed the most beautiful man.

"I have come for you Adlyn."He smiled.

"You truly have the wrong girl and where the hell are my parents?" I replied.

"You belong to me now." He bit out.

"I don't belong to anyone."I seethed.

I felt a gush of wind and before I could even blink he had me pinned against the wall. 

"What are you?"I whispered.

He chuckled ignoring my question and he leaned in close running his fingers through my hair.

"My parents will come looking for me."I stated in fear.

"No they won't because long ago they sold your soul to a demon so they could have all of this."He chuckled again.

I looked around the large home I had grown up in with parents that loved me. 

"I don't believe you."I seethed.

"Well the proof is written in blood."He growled.

He pulled out a rolled up tan paper and shoved it close to my face. Written in what looked like blood was my parents name on a contract for my soul....

She needs to stop thinking what she's doing is brave and stop be courageous and just get the hell outa there
Yes they sold her soul. But i don't see anywhere that he purchased her corpral being. So null and void or has to wait till natural death.
Whish could find a better word than mate. Like beloved or something. So tired of that word
Love your story so far, but your sentences run together in places lol I don't mean to be a grammar Nazi but you need some commas :P
I instantly thought of this quote. 
                              
                              "You've been raising him like a pig for slaughter!"
                                               -Severus Snape (Harry Potter)
LoL i so love talking, telling off and yelling at characters