When Amy lands her dream job it comes at a high cost; she has to move, away from her family and friends. All on her own, she has to learn the rules of this competitive lifestyle that she chose, and there's no turning back.
I like it a lot. But I agree that the grammar needs work. Other than that I think you should continue with this!
SURPRISE SURPRISE at the end DEFINITELY LOVED IT! DEFINITELY COTINUE!
i like third person, and Amy seems nice!
honestly upload! voted!