The Dragon Chase: A Tale of the Everburning City

There is no night in the Everburning City. 

There can never be. 

For four hundred years, the City has been besieged by an enemy that has swallowed the entire world. The land that the City now sits upon has been claimed from the Gloam; a grey mass of smoke-like mist that kills everything within it. Only fire, pumped endlessly from beneath the world, holds the Gloam at bay.

But things move beneath the shrouding mists of the Gloam, and they march for the City. Against them lie only the resolve of its soldiers, and the audacity of Crafter Tabitha a'Loria, and her apprentice Gerald Raeth, defying the powers of the City to build the first hope humanity has known since the Everburning City's founding.

Notes: Highest Rank #1 in Fantasy, A Wattpad Featured Novel. 

Cover: Credit and thanks to @Ideologically for this marvellous bit of work. 

Edited by @jgfairytales

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It's the green mist from Narnia 3 all over again 😂👍 loving this so far

You’ve done a great job establishing the premise of the story. It’s short and to the point, but still beautifully descriptive. I wouldn’t exactly say I’m hooked, though. It needs more compelling emotion. Give readers a reason to care about what’s happening.

The beneficial Bore, unlike the Bore that released the Dark One in Wheel of Time books. I like it.

This is an excellent intro. I'm already intrigued by this world.

Is there a reason for the change in tense in this paragraph and the next?

Caffeine: I honestly couldn't find anything wrong with this prologue. It's short, but I don't think any caffeine is needed.