Evangaline

1 Part Story 233 Reads 17 Votes
Phillipa By MissPippa Updated 4 years ago
No one crosses the fence. No matter what. No one wants to see the ghosts of the Big House. The scary ghosts that wear gowns and frilly shirts in the bright sunshine. The one's who walk around with parasoles and pet dogs at their feet. The Lady with dramatic curls in her hair and several women following her where ever she moved. And the Lord. With his horses and his men... No one crosses the Fence 
    
    Eve and her little sister Kelly go to one of the biggest parties of the whole year. But as Eve - a social queen - goes round partying, Kelly - the more quiet, nerdy one, partys even more!  The highschool King, Sean takes an interest in Eve and makes his move in a game of Spin the Bottle. But what Eve doesn't know is when she chooses Truth or Dare she is also choosing the two different ways her life could change forever.sean dares her to fross the fence and run up and touch the Big House. But will Eve accept?
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10
this is a good start. i'm not really a big fan of vampire so this isn't my sort of story. i like how you've chosen the party scene to open it with as it makes it more interesting. however, i thought there were quite a lot of characters introduced all at once which could be quite confusing. also there were a few technical errors, so you should consider doing some proof reading or getting someone to edit your work. other than that a good job :)
                                    
                                    RATING: 7 / 10