Life on the edge (discontinued)

Life on the edge (discontinued)

346 Reads 16 Votes 4 Part Story
Carly_the_alien By Carly_the_alien Updated Feb 06, 2011

Formerly  Untitled, this story revolves around a sixteen year girl named Jamie who's parents were murdered. And she doesn't know who killed them, but she'll find out. Running away from home from child services and the town she was born in, Jamie travels to New York City, hundreds of miles away. There she must learn how to live in the slums, dodge criminals and discover the fantasy world her parents have kept hidden from her.

BringMeTheLight BringMeTheLight Apr 09, 2011
Really well written and once again good description :D
                              One tip try not to use Jamie's name so much instead use other ways of referring to her but you don't have to listen to me it's just an idea :))
BringMeTheLight BringMeTheLight Apr 09, 2011
I love the beginning the description is amazing!!! You can picture it perfectly in your head :D
Carly_the_alien Carly_the_alien Jan 24, 2011
@randompenguinali ahahahah fail, I used it 3 times. aha whoops. :/
                              But thanks for reading it and noticing X)
                              Don't worry, this story is going to have a lot more action...I hope (y) Finger's crossed. 
Carly_the_alien Carly_the_alien Jan 24, 2011
Idk, should I continue this story? I'm trying to juice it up and make it more interesting...but eh. x)