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Stephanie By BlueMoon5897 Updated Jan 02, 2012

After the murder of her sister Delilah, Raven Richards life has turned into chaos. Her parents ignore her, her old friends have left her, and Delilah is haunting her and giving Raven horrid dreams that keep meaning something. When Raven tries to commit suicide, a stranger pulls her back. She never had time to see him but she can't help but wondering who this mysterious man is that only leaves her one message... "Don't fall." Join Raven as she tries to find out who this mysterious man is and how to stop Delilah from haunting her forever.

Aliceally6 Aliceally6 Feb 10, 2011
Really good story line! Great descriptions and you make it easy for readers to picture what everything looks like and how things happen! I really enjoyed reading this chapter! :)
trishthewriter trishthewriter Feb 10, 2011
Great beginning. You really know how to hook your readers which is key to getting them to keep reading. I voted. 
Thischickisbomb Thischickisbomb Feb 04, 2011
This is really good.
                              I am totally enjoying it.
                              I can't belived he punched her and all the teacher said was detention.
                              PShthht School these days.
                              ANyways  liking it so far on to the next chapter
xPixie xPixie Feb 02, 2011
way to start it off! Really good, completely grabbed my attention:P
                              Im enthralled. 
hiboo45 hiboo45 Feb 02, 2011
that was....AWESOME i have never loved a story this much it!!!  The prolog was wonderful it keeps you wanting to read more!! The words were perfect Also voted and fanned!!!!
tianajade tianajade Jan 28, 2011
I think this is a really good start! Only a few grammar errors here and there, but nothing too major to turn a reader off your story. I love the story idea, it's something different; at the moment anyway (: It definitely makes me want to read on! *Voted and added to Library*.