Advent

Advent

2.2K Reads 49 Votes 11 Part Story
Guyinblack By Guyinblack Updated Apr 20, 2011

Gale Wolfe, a normal teen from San Francisco, soon learns of a whole different world and is forced to take part in a test that could decide not only his but the fate of both worlds. He becomes an Engraved, a special human that can turn his or her own psych into a weapon.

tianajade tianajade Feb 23, 2011
A good beginning. It draws the reader in instantly! There's a few too many adverbs in there, which may turn some readers off...it didn't turn me off though! Only a few grammar errors, but nothing too major. Great storyline, as well! Good job, and keep writing! (:
christiangeek christiangeek Jan 29, 2011
i like it so far. i missing something though like im not really sure but its missing something. im hannah by the way. message me anytime 
Guyinblack Guyinblack Jan 29, 2011
@ehesse thanks a whole lot for the advice. I'll be sure to keep that in mind and I'll do my best not to let you down :)