Nephilim

Nephilim

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JulieSummer By AllyLaly Updated 6 days ago

Highest ranking so far: #4 in Paranormal
   
     
    
   
All my life, I've been thinking about the same thing...that because of who I was, I was destined to be alone forever...

     
But who would've thought, that I was actually destined to be bound to Death himself?   
     
    
  
"His fingers went under my chin, coaxing me to look back up at him, and as soon as I did, my heart started racing again, noticing the way his haunting eyes were now trained on my lips, as he huskily said those two words again,

"Forgive me."

And before I could utter a single word, his soft, plump lips crashed against mine in a chaste, yet passionate kiss, sending warm tingles all over my body, making my heart almost jump out of my chest, as we stayed like that for a few moments, before he suddenly pulled back, staring at me a little shocked, only now realising what he had just done, then turned around and quickly walked away, leaving me standing there, speechless."

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  • abomination
  • angels
  • archangels
  • azrael
  • death
  • demons
  • desire
  • fallen
  • heaven
  • hell
  • humor
  • love
  • lucifer
  • michael
  • nephilim
  • paranormal
  • protective
  • raphael
  • siblings
  • wattys2017
JohnAnraad JohnAnraad May 17
Good start, we already get a sense of fear the main character in relation to his sister. I did find the dialogue a little hard to follow, which did disturb the flow. In saying that I would read on to find out what happens next :) #BGBC
brgmRx brgmRx Jun 12
 #bgbc great first chapter!!! It was a gripping chapter that drew me in because first of all the flashback wants u to find out what happened- especially to his mother- and then the phone call makes you curious as to his profession and what the meeting is about. Hardly any grammar mistakes- phew.
- - Jun 07
 #BGBC
                              Nice job with the dialogue. It flows pretty well. I wonder what happened to his mom? It's sound like Mr. Summers is in some kind of dangerous business with this Gio guy. 
                              Awesome chapter!
The flashback is so sad...I wonder what happened to their mother.
"...go," she whispered.* (Replace full stop by comma as the sentence is continuing after the dialogue.)
brgmRx brgmRx Jun 12
 #bgbc HAH why do I have the sense something bad will happen?